Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In the contemporary world, some people believe that the best way to provide sufficient accomdations is to build tall apartment blocks in large cities. However, i completely diagree with the statement and i will discuss further in this paragraph.

The first reason to disagree with the statement is that it may unsafe during earthquakes. Nowadays, with the increasing rate of environmental problems such as earthquakes, floods and many more. It is not safe for those people who live in apartments especially on top floors it may cause injury to them and they may loose their life. Moreover, it is difficult for older citizen and pregant women to move out from buldings in the case of medical emergencies such as heart attack and labour pain if the lift is not working properly. Furthermore, while living in tall apartments may dangerous for children and toddlers they may fall from the stairs and building too, cause serious injury to themselves.

In addition to building tall apartment blocks in big cities in not enterainely bad because it is benefical for them who live in nuclear family or for the people who are busy in their worklife because they get security and even the flats are cheaper than houses. Moreover, while living in apartment individuals can get many facilites such as lift, gym and a big park or garden for their children and old parents so, they can get fresh air and do some basic exercises such as walking.

In conclusion, I believe that building tall apartment blocks in urban cities is not enough to provide homes because it may unsafe for people during earthquakes, floods and in other emergencies.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear: you disagree that tall apartment blocks are the best way to provide homes, and you give relevant concerns about earthquakes and evacuations, alongside some benefits such as security and shared facilities. However, the response only partly develops the central question of how cities can provide enough homes. The risks to residents explain why high-rise living may be unsafe, but do not show why it is less effective at supplying housing or identify a better approach. The paragraph acknowledging advantages also makes your overall case less fully explained. To strengthen the response, compare high-rise construction with alternatives such as renovating existing buildings or building medium-density housing, and support each main point with a specific example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and the main ideas are generally grouped by topic. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear. The first body paragraph moves from earthquakes to floods, medical emergencies and children without explaining how each point supports the argument about providing enough homes. Linking phrases such as “Moreover” and “Furthermore” are repeated and sometimes connect ideas mechanically. The second body paragraph introduces benefits, but its relationship to your disagreement is not made explicit. Use topic sentences that state each paragraph’s purpose, then explain how the examples support your position. A clearer contrast between the benefits of apartments and your reasons for rejecting them would improve the overall flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “environmental problems,” “medical emergencies,” “nuclear family,” “security” and “facilities,” so the reader can follow the general subject. However, the range is limited and several spelling, word-form and collocation errors make the writing less precise, for example “accomdations,” “diagree,” “enterainely” and “get fresh air.” Some expressions are also awkward or unclear, such as “busy in their worklife” and “fall from the stairs and building.” Aim for accurate, natural phrases and vary repeated general words such as “people” and “building.” Proofreading spelling and choosing precise terms for housing, safety and urban planning would make your ideas easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including clauses introduced by “because,” “while” and “if.” However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to interrupt the flow. For example, “it may unsafe” is missing a verb form, while “Nowadays, with the increasing rate of environmental problems such as earthquakes…” is a sentence fragment. There are also problems with articles, agreement and sentence boundaries, as in “it may cause injury to them and they may loose their life” and “building tall apartment blocks in big cities in not…” Work on complete sentence structures, subject–verb agreement and consistent punctuation. Separating long sentences into shorter, complete units will help you express your reasoning more clearly.

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