Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In large cities definitely needed to build tall apartment blocks. It's very helpful for society. I difinitely agree with this statement.

They live in a comfortable and get modern furnish home. In these apartment presence modern style bedrooms, kitchen,washroom,restroom,playground, prayer hall,gym center, walking area.

Here is a espacial benifit for children, they are playing together. They built a strong bonding with new people and expanding one's social circle too. It has other benifit also, that is if someone feels like very unfit or illness that time other neighbours helps him or her. They going to the hospital at the moment and save her or his life.

In my experience in my real life, i saw a incident that once a night a old man suddenly felt pain in his chest that time he called a young boy who lived in same flat beside on him. At the moment, that young boy called a ambulance and took him hospital. Finally that old man get back home in fully fit and all people were very happy.That was very happy moment i was seen.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

Your position is clear: you agree that tall apartment blocks are needed, and you give relevant points about shared facilities, children socialising, and neighbours helping in emergencies. The account of the older man receiving help is a useful personal example. However, the response addresses the question only partially because it does not explain why high-rise construction is the best way to provide enough homes compared with alternatives, such as building outward or improving existing housing. Most points are asserted rather than developed, and the example focuses more on neighbourly support than on housing supply. The response is also 69 words below the required minimum, leaving limited space to explain and support your argument. Develop the central housing argument and add a relevant comparison or further example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic sequence: it states agreement, lists apartment facilities and social benefits, then gives a personal example. This makes the general direction understandable, and the example follows the point about neighbours helping one another. However, the ideas are not organised into clear paragraphs, and the list of facilities does not lead smoothly into the discussion of social benefits. Linking is limited and sometimes awkward, as in “It has other benefit also, that is,” while “At the moment” is repeated and does not clearly show the relationship between events. Use separate paragraphs for your main reasons and example, and connect each point explicitly to the claim that tall blocks provide more homes efficiently.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “apartment blocks,” “social circle,” “neighbours,” and “ambulance,” and the reader can generally understand your intended meaning. However, the range is limited and several word choices, forms, and spellings are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “modern furnish home,” “espacial benifit,” “unfit,” and “get back home in fully fit.” These errors sometimes make the message harder to follow, particularly in the description of the emergency. Aim for accurate topic-specific phrases and check spelling and word forms. For example, describe “modern furnishings” and say that the man “recovered fully” rather than relying on approximate expressions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Your writing relies mainly on short, simple statements, with a few attempts to connect ideas using clauses such as “if someone feels like very unfit or illness.” These attempts show an effort to express more complex relationships, but they are often faulty. Errors occur frequently in sentence structure, verb forms, agreement, articles, and punctuation: “In large cities definitely needed” lacks a clear subject, “They going to the hospital” has an incorrect verb form, and “a old man” uses the wrong article. Some sentences are difficult to interpret because several errors occur together. Practise building complete sentences with a subject and verb, then check tense and articles; for example, “A neighbour called an ambulance and took him to hospital.”

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