Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is true that constructing tall apartment in the big urban areas is the effective method to give sufficient space for people.I completely support the idea as including lack of enough place, over population,urbanization,lack of government initiatives, are behind the reason to agree my viewpoint.

There are a number of reasons why I cosider that making tall buildings are the efficient way to provide enough space for the people.The one posible reason is that there are lacking of enough land available in the urban sites which make the impossible to live people more in cities.Consequently, it is higly necessary to make tall buildings to live more here.The another possible reason is that population are increasing outrageously day by day.For this reason,the cities present land are not sufficient for this over increasing people.Therefore,it is crucial to make tall apartments to live more people here.For instance,a one storeyed building is for ten people live here,if this building is expanded to construct ten storyed that will be enough for 100 people.Thus making tall apartments are the ultimate solution for providing more people living space.

Moreover,urbanization is the another prominent reason for making more tall apartments in the cities.nowadays an inreasing number of people are moving urban sites for several reasons such as employment facilities,medical facilities, shopping amenities, and recreational advantages and so many on.So giveing them a living space like rented house,hotels,or cottage high flat are necessary to build sothat they could live that space.Furthermore,lack of goverment plans are the another cause to make high buildings .By lacking local authority and government plans are bound to make more and more buildings in the tallest size.

In conclusion, for considering aforementioned reasons i believe this making high buildings are the ultimate solution for providing enough space for large ities people.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear from the introduction: you completely support tall apartment blocks as a way to provide homes, and the conclusion restates this view. You give relevant reasons, including limited urban land, population growth and migration to cities, and the example comparing a one-storey building with a ten-storey one helps illustrate increased capacity. However, some points are asserted rather than explained. The reference to insufficient government plans, for example, does not clearly show why this makes tall blocks the best solution. The discussion also focuses mainly on accommodating more people, with little consideration of whether tall blocks are better than other approaches. Develop each reason with a clearer explanation or specific example to make the argument more fully supported.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion. The main ideas are grouped sensibly, and linking expressions such as “Consequently,” “For instance,” and “Moreover” help show relationships between points. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical because several sentences rely on repeated patterns such as “The another possible reason” and “For this reason.” Some connections are also unclear: the shift from urbanisation to “rented house, hotels, or cottage” does not explain how these examples support the case for tall apartment blocks. The final paragraph is brief and mostly repeats the position. Use more varied transitions and make the link between each example and the central argument explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “urbanization,” “population,” “employment facilities,” and “recreational advantages.” This gives you enough language to communicate the main argument, but word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or unnatural, as in “give sufficient space,” “over increasing people,” and “the ultimate solution for providing more people living space.” Spelling errors such as “cosider,” “posible,” “higly,” and “goverment” also reduce accuracy. Some phrases are repeated, particularly “tall buildings” and “make.” Build a more precise set of expressions for housing and urban development, and check spelling and collocations so your ideas sound clearer and more natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including cause-and-effect structures with “which” and “Consequently,” and a conditional example beginning “if this building is expanded.” However, grammatical control is uneven, and errors sometimes make sentences difficult to follow. Examples include “constructing tall apartment … is,” “there are lacking of enough land,” and “population are increasing,” where agreement and sentence structure need attention. Articles, plurals and verb forms are also inconsistent, as in “The another possible reason” and “making tall apartments are.” Punctuation and spacing around sentence boundaries need more care. Practise building accurate subject–verb patterns and checking each sentence for a clear subject and main verb before adding complex clauses.

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