Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The most efficiant method of building more living space for people in bigger urban areas is to construct more elongated flat blocks. Since alot of people are shifting into urban areas from rural places in search for better lifestyle and job oppprtunities, due to which cities are running out of living spaces for individuals to settle down. In my opinion, i agree that it is very crucial to built taller apartments for urbanisation even tho it might cause some enviromental problems.

The primary reason why i hold this view is that, people dont have plenty of job choices in rural areas due to which they have no option other than to move in cities to make a satisfying lives for themselves. Although this has lead to overcrowding of population in the urban areas which give rise to less households for public to live in. Renting, for example is an major issue people face due to lack of places and very expensive rents.

Another important factor to consider is that, even tho over population can lead to enviromental problems, but the best way to deal with this problem is to make more tall apartment societies in which people can easily live in. For instance, apartments can be very useful because it will use only a small piece of land to make homes for more then 20 families or more depending on how many floors are there, while on the other hand, if you make a houseing societies on the same tiny piece of land it will hardly be securing half the number of families that an apartment is doing.

In conclusion, even tho there are disadvantages such are overcrowding, enviromental issues, but still I firmly agree with the concept that building taller apartment blocks is the best way to deal with the problem of not having enoungh homes in the cities.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear from the introduction: you agree that taller apartment blocks are an effective response to housing shortages, and the conclusion restates this view. Both body paragraphs give relevant reasons, including migration to cities for work and the greater number of households that can fit on a small plot. The comparison with low-rise housing is a useful example. However, some points are asserted rather than fully explained: the environmental problems are mentioned but not specified, and the first paragraph could explain more clearly how job migration leads to a shortage of homes. Develop these ideas with a concrete example or explanation, and acknowledge when high-rise construction may not be suitable, to make the argument more complete and persuasive.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting separate reasons, and a conclusion. The progression from urban migration to land-efficient apartment construction is easy to follow, and examples such as the comparison between apartments and housing societies help connect claims to support. Cohesion is sometimes mechanical or unclear, however. For example, the opening sentence of the second paragraph begins with “Although” but does not complete a contrasting clause, while “even tho … but” in the next paragraph combines two contrast markers. Some long sentences also bundle several ideas together. Use linking expressions more selectively, ensure each sentence expresses a complete relationship, and make references such as “this problem” explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main argument, including “overcrowding,” “urban areas,” “environmental problems,” and “piece of land.” There are also attempts at more specific phrasing, such as “job opportunities” and “satisfying lives.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or imprecise, which makes parts less natural: “elongated flat blocks” does not clearly mean high-rise apartment buildings, and “make a satisfying lives” is not idiomatic. Spelling errors such as “efficiant,” “oppprtunities,” and “enoungh” are noticeable. Build a more accurate set of housing and urban-planning terms, and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “Since,” “Although,” and “because,” and the overall meaning is generally understandable. Some grammatical errors remain, particularly in sentence construction and agreement. For example, “Although this has lead to overcrowding … which give rise” has an incomplete contrast structure and a verb that does not agree with its subject; “it will use only a small piece of land” also has an unclear subject. There are errors with articles and plurals in phrases such as “an major issue” and “a satisfying lives,” as well as punctuation around introductory clauses. Practise building complete sentences with clear subjects and check agreement, articles, and clause boundaries.

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