Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays many builders and other construction workers builds apartment with blocks to build tall apartments in large cities to provide enough rooms. I agree that it has some benefits, but I also believe that it has certain drawbacks.

On the one hand, Some construction wokers and builders build tall and large apartment in big cities to provide enough homes. It is a decent way and a very usefull to cover more people in one building. For example if a builder build a small apartment block so he can not provide enough homes because there are to many people in large cities and if he build tall apartment block he can provide enough home and also can reduce their expense.

On the other hand, it has many disadvantage for instance if a builder build apartment block tall he can cover all people but it is risky because the strength of building will be fifty percent because if this apartment divided in 2 floor there will more cement and other mixtures and it can make them more strong. Talk aprmatment blocks has many Risks it is not safe for people lifes which will live there.

In conclusion, I'm with both views people may build tall apartment block to reduce expenses and to cover enough homes, but there is also some disadvantage like low quality material and people safety.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You address the topic and give a partly balanced position: you acknowledge that tall blocks can house more people and reduce costs, while raising concerns about building quality and safety. However, “I agree that it has some benefits” and the conclusion that you are “with both views” do not make your degree of agreement fully clear. The supporting ideas are also limited or unclear: the claim that a tall building’s strength will be “fifty percent” is not explained, and the comparison with dividing it into two floors is difficult to follow. The response is 24 words below the required minimum, which restricts the space available to explain and support your points. State your position precisely and develop each reason with a clear explanation or relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two contrasting body paragraphs signposted by “On the one hand” and “On the other hand,” and a conclusion. This helps the reader identify the main stages of your argument. However, progression within the paragraphs is uneven: the explanation about building strength and dividing an apartment into floors is hard to connect, and the conclusion repeats the earlier points rather than resolving the balance between them. Some linking is mechanical, and references such as “it” and “they” do not always make clear whether you mean the building, the builder, or residents. Use clearer topic sentences, connect each example directly to its main point, and make the conclusion state your final position consistently.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “construction workers,” “apartment blocks,” “expenses,” “quality material,” and “safety,” so the subject is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, especially “build,” “tall apartment block,” and “enough homes.” There are also noticeable spelling and word-choice problems, such as “usefull,” “wokers,” “aprmatment,” and “people lifes,” which can make parts of the response difficult to read. Some combinations are unnatural, including “cover more people” and “Talk apartment blocks.” Build a more precise vocabulary for housing and urban planning, and check spelling and collocations so your ideas are expressed naturally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including a conditional example beginning “if a builder build…,” but complex structures are often not controlled accurately. Errors in verb agreement and forms occur repeatedly: “workers builds,” “if a builder build,” and “if he build.” There are also problems with articles, plurals, and sentence construction, as in “a small apartment block,” “enough home,” and “there will more cement.” These errors sometimes make the intended meaning difficult to follow, particularly in the explanation of building strength. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement and conditional patterns, and check articles and plural nouns. Shorter, correctly formed sentences would make your reasoning clearer while you develop more complex structures.

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