Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The excellent route for giving houses in the metro cities is to construct tall height flats blocks. In my opinion i agree with this statement and my justification is stated in the upcoming paragraph with an relevant examples.

To begin with, in big cities the area is larger but against it there is large population too which is residing in the city eventought city includes many commercial complex which consumes more space of city so if houses are build in the form of flats or penthouse then more number of people live in the short area. for example mumbai is metrocity so if apartments are build for living purpose then it utilizes less space and more people can reside in it and as a result city looks more beautiful as it is built with plan and more people live in comfortable manner in less space. Furthermore,building apartments blocks for proving home

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You state a clear position—“I agree with this statement”—and give a relevant central reason: apartment blocks can house more people on limited urban land. The Mumbai example also supports this point. However, the response addresses the task only partially: it does not explain whether tall blocks are the best way compared with other housing approaches, and the supporting ideas are brief and sometimes unclear. The final sentence stops at “for proving home,” leaving a point unfinished, while no conclusion restates your view. The response is also 99 words below the required minimum, which leaves too little space to develop reasons and examples. Extend the argument with a second reason or a limitation, explain the example more fully, and complete the essay with a conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening gives your opinion, followed by a paragraph beginning “To begin with,” and you use “for example” and “Furthermore” to signal relationships. These markers show how you intend to connect ideas. However, the overall progression is difficult to follow because the main paragraph combines several points—population, commercial buildings, land use, appearance and comfort—without clearly separating or explaining them. The final “Furthermore” introduces a new point but the sentence is incomplete, so the response has no clear ending. Use separate paragraphs for distinct reasons, connect each example directly to its claim, and add a conclusion. This would make the organisation more coherent and the links less mechanical.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the main topic, with relevant terms such as “population,” “commercial complex,” “apartments,” and “reside.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or combinations are unnatural, which sometimes makes the meaning less clear. For example, “the excellent route for giving houses” and “tall height flats blocks” do not express the housing proposal naturally; “metro cities” and “metrocity” are also imprecise or inconsistent. There are spelling and word-form problems, including “eventought” and “build” where a past participle is needed. Aim for accurate collocations and consistent forms, such as “provide housing,” “high-rise apartment blocks,” and “metropolitan cities.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences and use a conditional structure in “if houses are build … then more number of people live,” showing an effort to express cause and result. However, the range is limited, and complex sentences are often faulty. Examples include “in big cities the area is larger but against it there is large population,” where the clause structure is difficult to control, and “if apartments are build,” which has an incorrect verb form. There are also errors with articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries, as in “with an relevant examples” and the run-on sequence beginning “so if houses are build.” Capitalise “I,” use complete sentences, and practise accurate conditional forms and article use. Shorter, controlled sentences would improve clarity.

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