Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Nowadays, It is topic of discussion that whether tall buildings should be installed in order to provide sufficent homes, or not. I agreed with the statement on large extand that skyscrapers should be build. The upcomping paragraphs are going to discuss both points of views before reaching certain conclusion.

Commencing with the benefits of having tall building, first and foremost is that it is budget friendly. To explain it more, when people get an apartment instead of getting a big house, they can easily save huge amount of money, which can be used in tough time.Moreover, another advantage will be of opening space on roads for car parking as well as for walking area, as a result, it not only assist the govenment to create wide roads with spacious parkings but also helps to reduce the traffic jams with wider roads.

However, some have faith that if they live in the apertments of building, the may feel suffocated and depressed. for instance, some people prefer to live in the open place having proper sources of open air and sunlight and plants. which is only possible on big houses such as village homes. for those people, buildings may sounds as prison or case. Additionally, such building flats does not have space to do physical activities to children, For example, football cricket and other games, which helps juveniles to grow mentally and physically.

To conclude, although there are some cons of this develment, the pros are surpassing the cons as it assist the individuals to save money for thier future.

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response6.0
Coherence and Cohesion6.0
Lexical Resource5.5
Grammatical Range and Accuracy5.0
Overall5.5

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear: you agree that tall apartment buildings are an effective way to provide homes, and the conclusion restates this view. You also address both advantages and disadvantages, including affordability and the concern that flats may limit access to outdoor space and children’s activities. These are relevant points, but some are not fully connected to the question of providing enough homes in large cities. For example, the discussion of parking and wider roads is asserted rather than explained, and the opposing view is not answered in detail. To strengthen the response, explain more directly how high-rise construction increases housing capacity and support each main point with a specific example or fuller reasoning.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph on benefits, a paragraph presenting concerns, and a conclusion. Signposting such as “Moreover,” “However,” and “To conclude” helps readers follow the main stages. However, some links between ideas are mechanical or unclear. The opening promises to discuss “both points of views,” but the essay does not clearly distinguish the writer’s argument from the opposing view until the second body paragraph. Within that paragraph, the shift from feeling suffocated to children’s activities could be smoother, and the sentence beginning “which is only possible” is not clearly attached to the preceding idea. Use clearer topic sentences and connect each example explicitly to the point it supports.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “skyscrapers,” “traffic jams,” “sunlight,” and “physical activities,” and the meaning is generally understandable. There are also attempts at less common or formal expressions, such as “budget friendly” and “surpassing,” but several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, which limits precision. Examples include “homes should be installed,” “large extand,” “open place,” and “case” where the intended meaning appears to be a prison or cage. Spelling errors such as “sufficent,” “govenment,” and “develment” also affect the overall impression. Build accuracy by learning common collocations for housing and urban planning, and check spelling and word forms during revision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mixture of simple and complex sentences, including clauses with “when,” “as a result,” and “although.” This gives the response some structural variety, and the main message can usually be followed. However, errors in sentence construction, agreement, articles, and punctuation recur. For example, “the may feel” lacks the correct subject pronoun, “it not only assist” has incorrect agreement, and “such building flats does not have” has an unclear subject and verb form. The fragment “which is only possible on big houses” also needs to be joined to a complete sentence. Practise checking each sentence for a clear subject and verb, and use full stops and capital letters consistently.

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