Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Nowadays, cities are growing rapidly so finding houses for everyone has become a major problem, while providing enough space in large cities to build tall appartment blocks. It is'nt the only solution of this issue, I believe that goverment should also focus on developing the surrounding areas.

Building vertical appartment will help the thousand peoples to live in a small footprint and it provide them such facilities that single house or living in a owned home cannot gives, like you they just have to pay for maintainance, while in other way they have to pay for their own electricity bill, sewage moreover for water connections. In cities greenry have almost been vanished because of housing. Goverment provide different lands in which individuals are constructing their houses.

When we were building our desired home, my uncles were saying that we cannot buy appartments instead we can build our own building, as we live in a joint family. Our house contains 4 floors, furthermore we contribute t

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the housing shortage and give a relevant position: tall apartment blocks can help, but the government should also develop surrounding areas. The personal example about your family’s four-floor home adds some support. However, the response only partially addresses the question: it does not clearly explain whether apartment blocks are the best way to provide enough homes, and the comparison with individually owned houses is difficult to follow. Several points, such as shared facilities and the loss of green space, are introduced but not explained or linked clearly to your position. The response is also below the required 250 words, so the argument remains substantially underdeveloped. State your degree of agreement directly, then explain and support two or three relevant reasons with specific examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: the opening presents the issue and your view, followed by points about apartment living and a family example. Some linking expressions, including “furthermore” and “while,” show an effort to connect ideas. However, progression is difficult to follow because several different points are crowded together, and relationships between them are not always clear. For example, the discussion of maintenance costs shifts to electricity, sewage and water bills without explaining the comparison, while the final personal example ends abruptly. Use separate paragraphs for your position, supporting reasons and example, and make each paragraph develop one main idea. Clearer references and more precise links between claims would make the response easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, such as “tall apartment blocks,” “small footprint,” “joint family” and “greenery,” which helps communicate the general subject. However, the range is limited, and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unclear, sometimes making the intended meaning harder to understand. Examples include “vertical apartment,” “the thousand peoples,” “living in a owned home” and “pay for maintenance.” Spelling errors such as “appartment,” “goverment” and “greenry” are also noticeable. Build a more accurate set of housing-related expressions and check spelling carefully. Prefer natural phrases such as “high-rise apartments,” “thousands of people,” and “maintenance costs,” and ensure each phrase fits the meaning you intend.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including a contrast introduced with “while” and a sentence beginning “When we were building our desired home.” However, control is inconsistent, and errors in sentence structure, agreement, articles and verb forms frequently affect clarity. For example, “it provide them” needs subject–verb agreement, “cannot gives” has an incorrect verb form, and “It is'nt the only solution of this issue” is not formed accurately. The opening sentence also joins ideas in a way that leaves the relationship unclear, and the final sentence is incomplete. Practise building complete sentences with one clear main clause, then check agreement, articles and verb forms before adding subordinate clauses.

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