Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

These days, with increasing poplution the major problem of housing occoures. Moslty it is big issue for urbanstations to provide nest tp the peoples. Some people belive the best way to tackel this is constructed the larg buildings and make numerose flats in that buildings. I completely agree with this idea and in this essay i will support my opinion with example.

Firstly, by increasing rate of citizen if they build thier own homes it can requierd the more land area for this. While enormouse cities are already have accuired the major sector of land and for this they cutt the trees which increase the rate of pollution. Although cities already have minor number of trees. For example lahore the capital of punjab is the one of the bigest city of pakistan which is located at the bank of ravi river, when housing socities build in the area of river, so when the moon soon start the chance of flood increased and it comes thent the major socites goes under the water.

Another major issue is global warming, when we cutt the tree for or forest to increase the area of cities it affect the nature. Natural habitant break and they took years to regenrate. Although the this affect the seasonal cycle and cause the natural desasters. For example due to global warming the this year many flood seen in north of pakistan which cause for death of hundred of people and lost of financials.

As a result making flats block is wothit, it secure the nature and also provide number of nest to peoples in consise and planed area, because if every person build his own it take larg area while making one building required less space and provide multilple apartments to more citizen at one place.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear from the introduction: “I completely agree,” and the conclusion returns to the idea that apartment blocks use less land while housing more people. You give relevant reasons, especially the pressure on land and the potential to protect natural areas, and you include examples connected to Lahore and flooding in northern Pakistan. This addresses the task, but some points are not fully explained. The Lahore example focuses on building near a river and flood risk, so its link to why tall blocks are the best housing solution needs to be made explicit. The global-warming paragraph also repeats the environmental point without showing as clearly how apartment construction would prevent the harm. Develop each reason with a direct comparison to lower-density housing.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs beginning “Firstly” and “Another major issue,” and a concluding paragraph. This gives the reader an overall route through your argument, and the main ideas are generally grouped by topic. However, connections between claims and examples are sometimes unclear. For instance, the discussion of Lahore moves from housing near the river to monsoon flooding without explaining the relationship to apartment blocks. The second body paragraph also shifts from tree loss to habitat damage and seasonal cycles, with limited development of each link. Some transitions, including “Although,” do not clearly express the intended relationship. Use topic sentences that state one reason, then explain it and connect the example directly to your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “global warming,” “natural habitat,” “seasonal cycle,” and “apartments,” and you communicate the general argument despite errors. However, spelling and word-choice problems are noticeable and sometimes make the reader pause: “poplution,” “occoures,” “urbanstations,” and “nest” appear where you mean population, occurs, urban areas, and homes. Some combinations are also unnatural, such as “secure the nature” and “lost of financials.” This fits a limited but usable range: the topic is understandable, but inaccurate forms and repeated basic wording reduce precision. Build a reliable set of housing and environmental collocations, and check spelling and word forms carefully before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a conditional structure in “if they build their own homes” and a relative clause in “which is located at the bank of ravi river.” However, complex sentences are often difficult to follow because of errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction. For example, “cities are already have” combines incompatible verb forms, while “it can requierd the more land area” has an incorrect verb pattern and article use. The long sentence beginning “For example lahore” also joins several clauses without clear punctuation. These errors can make relationships between ideas unclear. Practise accurate basic sentence patterns first, then build longer sentences with controlled clauses and consistent punctuation.

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