Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Although many people believe that providing enough housing in large cities is best achieved by building high-rise apartment blocks. is convincing. I think in reverse and agree with the given statement. My inclination is justfied in the ensuring paragraph

Out of all arguments for providing enough homes in large cities, the strongest one to prove my view is that it will reduce the cost of apartments, making them affordable for everyone. This is to say, many apartments have large spaces, but it very expensive; only rich people buy in big cities, so I think it is good to have high-rise apartments. A good example for this is some people build good apartment in big cities but only rich once buy the apartment because it is very costly i think that everyone has right to buy goos arpartments their family. Besides this, It is also ture that enough home space have living good life in modern cities it possible to every one. by this i mean people can ready live in enough space because they dont have too much money to buy large space homes.

The other reason to prove my point is that sometimes people build too large apartments, but the main problem is that the city just because the population increases every year, and maintenance is also too much for big apartments; it is unnecessary to build big apartments.

another reason when it comes for small arpartments people can adjust in arpartments but main problem is too large cities had expensive apartments prices. in addition the fact the people dont buy large apartments is also logical.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You state a position—“I think in reverse and agree”—and give reasons related to affordability and the need to accommodate a growing city population. These points are relevant to housing provision, but the response only minimally answers the central question: whether tall apartment blocks are the best way to provide enough homes. The discussion shifts to large versus small apartments and their maintenance costs, without explaining clearly how building taller blocks would lower prices or increase the number of homes. The examples are vague and repetitive, and the second reason is difficult to follow. To develop the response, explain the link between high-rise construction and housing supply, then support each reason with a specific, relevant example and a clear explanation.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has an opening paragraph followed by two body paragraphs, and phrases such as “Besides this” and “The other reason” signal an attempt to organise ideas. However, the progression within paragraphs is often unclear: the first body paragraph moves from apartment costs to rich buyers, then to the right to buy apartments and living space, without showing how these points connect. The second paragraph introduces maintenance, population growth and small apartments, but their relationship is not made clear. Some linking phrases are awkward or repetitive, and the final sentence does not provide a clear conclusion. Group one main idea in each paragraph, explain it in a logical sequence, and use a concluding sentence to restate your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use basic vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “high-rise apartments,” “affordable,” “population,” and “maintenance.” These terms show that you can communicate the general subject, but the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, especially “apartments,” “large,” and “people.” There are also noticeable spelling and word-choice errors, such as “justfied,” “arpartments,” “once” for “ones,” and “goos.” Some expressions, including “enough home space have living good life,” are difficult to understand because the wording is not natural. Build a more precise housing-related vocabulary and check spelling; for example, distinguish “high-rise buildings” from “spacious apartments” and use “housing supply” when discussing the number of homes available.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentence forms, including “Out of all arguments … the strongest one … is that it will reduce the cost,” and use clauses introduced by “because” and “but.” However, control is inconsistent, and errors sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. The opening contains a sentence fragment after “Although,” while “it very expensive” is missing a verb. Other examples include “people build good apartment” and “people can ready live,” which show problems with articles, plurals and sentence construction. Capitalisation and punctuation are also unreliable, particularly where sentences run together. Practise writing accurate simple sentences first, then combine them using one clear subordinate clause; proofread for complete sentences, verb forms, articles and punctuation.

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