Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Build tall apartment blocks is the best was to provide sufficient homes in rural areas. To a major extent, I largely believe on this statement, my stance will be explained in upcoming paragraphs with valid reasons and appropriate example.

To begin with, there are numerous benefits of this development. First and foremost is that, building tall aprtment blocks takes less space and provide many houses in one place. It is helpful for environment becuase creating houses instead of falt requires more land. As a result, trees and natural eminities might be loosed. Secondly, it is also beneficial for young age individuals becuase tall aprtment takes small land space, so young age people use remaining space for physical sport purpose such as cricket and football. For example, as per the gujarat government research, becuase of building tall flats, gujarat government have enough remaining land that would be utilized to create sport complex.

However, it may be not overlooked that, build the tall aprtment also create the finacial concern in some cases. Becuase in big flats require tight security and better aminities such as water and eletricity. Moreover, big apartment blocks there are many families live, so it require CCTV to prevent theft and millicious activities. Furthermore, some time people may feel uncomfertable just because of lack of maintanace in flat public usage eminities such as lift.

To conclude, although, build tall aprtment blocks create some problems such as security, water and electricity, I largely believe that, it is beneficial for saving the space and creating the sport complex for young age individuals.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You take a position in favour of tall apartment blocks and give relevant reasons: they use less land, may preserve natural areas, and can leave space for sports facilities. You also acknowledge concerns about security and maintenance, so the response addresses both sides of the issue. However, the task asks whether this is the best way to provide homes in large cities, while the opening refers to “rural areas”; this weakens the focus. The position is also expressed awkwardly and not fully clarified, and several points remain under-developed. For instance, the Gujarat example is asserted but not explained or supported, and the concerns about utilities and security are not weighed against the benefits. Develop fewer points with clearer explanation and a more directly relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, a paragraph presenting benefits, a paragraph on drawbacks, and a conclusion. Sequencing is generally easy to follow, and signposts such as “To begin with,” “Secondly,” and “However” help show the relationship between ideas. This coherent overall arrangement supports the reader. At times, though, linking feels mechanical, and some connections are unclear. For example, the move from saving land to young people using the remaining space for sport needs a clearer explanation, while “as a result” introduces a consequence that is not fully developed. The conclusion repeats the main points rather than drawing them together. Use clearer references and explain how each example supports the paragraph’s central idea.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “apartment blocks,” “security,” “CCTV,” “maintenance,” and “sport complex,” which helps communicate the main ideas. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation, and spelling errors make parts of the response difficult to read. Examples include “natural eminities,” “loosed,” “tight security,” and “public usage eminities”; these either obscure the intended meaning or sound unnatural. Repetition of “tall apartment” and “young age individuals” also limits flexibility. Build a more accurate set of phrases for housing and urban planning, and check spelling carefully. More precise choices such as “high-rise buildings,” “green space,” and “shared facilities” would make the argument clearer and more natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a cause-and-effect structure with “because” and a contrast introduced by “although.” However, the range is limited, and attempts at longer structures are often faulty. For example, “Build tall apartment blocks is the best…” lacks a grammatical subject form, while “building tall apartment blocks takes less space and provide many houses” has a subject–verb agreement error. Other sentences have incomplete or awkward structures, such as “Because in big flats require tight security” and “big apartment blocks there are many families live.” These errors sometimes make the intended relationships harder to understand. Practise forming complete clauses, maintaining agreement, and using articles and verb forms consistently; then proofread each sentence for a clear subject and main verb.

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