Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The need for houses has increased over the last deacde, as the population is growing rapidly. This situation encourages the developers to build the high rise apartments as a substitute of homes to accomodate more people in the limited resources.

I agree with providing tall builiding for living.

first of all, The land is shrinking because of over population, extreme development of commercial activities

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

You establish a relevant position with “I agree” and begin to connect high-rise housing with accommodating more people where resources are limited. However, the response addresses the question only minimally: it stops while introducing a reason (“the land is shrinking because of over population”) and does not explain how apartment blocks provide enough homes or consider any limitations or alternatives. There is also no supporting example or developed conclusion. The response is substantially below the required 250 words, which leaves the argument incomplete and prevents you from demonstrating a fuller response to all parts of the task. Develop at least two reasons, explain each with a specific example, and state your position clearly throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The opening gives a basic progression from population growth to the proposed solution, and “first of all” signals that a reason is coming. This provides a small amount of organisation, but the response ends during that first point, so there is no complete paragraph structure or overall progression from introduction to conclusion. The relationship between shrinking land and the claim that tall buildings are best is suggested rather than explained. To improve, organise the essay into an introduction, separate body paragraphs and a conclusion; use each paragraph to develop one main idea, and connect claims to explanations and examples rather than relying on a single sequencing phrase.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “population,” “developers,” “high rise apartments,” “commercial activities” and “limited resources,” so the subject is generally identifiable. However, the range is narrow in this short response, and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, such as “a substitute of homes” and “providing tall builiding for living.” Spelling errors in “deacde,” “accomodate” and “builiding” also reduce accuracy. Aim for more precise housing vocabulary and check spelling carefully. For example, describe apartment blocks as a way to “accommodate more residents” and refer to “high-rise residential buildings” rather than using an unclear phrase.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response includes a correctly formed complex sentence: “The need for houses has increased … as the population is growing rapidly,” and the basic meaning is usually understandable. However, the range is limited, with little evidence of varied sentence structures, and errors appear in sentence boundaries and grammatical forms. “I agree with providing tall builiding for living” is not a well-formed expression, while the final line is an incomplete sentence ending after “commercial activities.” Capitalisation is also inconsistent, as in “first of all, The land.” Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use a wider mix of simple and complex structures while checking articles, agreement and punctuation.

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