Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The better way to provide enough homes which fullfill the desired need of peope in large cities is to build tall aparment blocks.Although to much extent I agree with this solution.

Not only it have some space saving benefits but also the environmental benefits.The city life is really fast then rural life.Its fast pace also require people to act fast in daily life activites and with that space saving by building talll apartment buildings it really helps to save space for large parks which can help people to have some moments for their relaxation.Also these parks provides environmental benefits by cleaning air and making it more breathable in this urban life where people vehicles already producing too much of air polloution.

These tall apartments buildings also provides some other benefits like have aleady built communites,playing,swimming and other activites sections in them which provides a sence of mental satisfaction by taking part in them.Because city life is mostly compromised of working long hours and have not much time to enjoy other parts of life.Also it is easier for people and services to actually protect people and provide proper security by gating these apartment buildings which is really difficult and is sometimes impossible to provide in larger housing areas where every street have hundreds of houses and offices.The one main benefit of these is that we make them much higher then normal office buildings and can provide many people homes in just one building.

In consludion i think for providing enough homes to people in large cities it is better to consider and implement the idea of tall high rise buildings because it have many benefits over normal housing societies.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear: you agree to a considerable extent that high-rise apartments are a good way to provide homes, and you give relevant reasons, including efficient land use, shared facilities, and security. The point that one building can house many people directly addresses the question. However, some ideas are asserted rather than fully explained. For example, the link between building upward and creating large parks is plausible, but you could explain how this depends on planning and available land. The discussion of communal facilities and security also needs a specific example or clearer explanation of how these benefits help meet housing needs. A brief acknowledgement of limitations, such as overcrowding or pressure on services, would make your response more fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs developing benefits, and a concluding position. Ideas generally progress from saving space to shared amenities and security, so the reader can follow your main argument. You also use linking expressions such as “Not only…but also,” “Also,” and “In conclusion.” At times, however, connections feel mechanical or unclear. The opening fragment “Although to much extent I agree with this solution” does not connect smoothly to the preceding sentence, and several ideas are joined with repeated “Also.” The second body paragraph contains multiple benefits in one long sequence. Use clearer topic sentences and divide or connect supporting points more deliberately to make the progression easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “space saving,” “environmental benefits,” “mental satisfaction,” “security,” and “high rise buildings.” These choices allow you to communicate the main ideas, and you attempt some less common expressions. However, spelling errors and imprecise or unnatural word combinations are noticeable, as in “fullfill,” “peope,” “aparment,” and “air polloution.” Phrases such as “the city life is really fast” and “already built communites” are understandable but not natural or precise in this context. Aim to learn accurate topic collocations and check spelling carefully. More precise terms for urban housing and planning would help you express your ideas with greater flexibility.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including the “Not only…but also” construction and clauses beginning with “which” and “because.” This shows some range, and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, errors in sentence structure, agreement, articles, and verb forms occur in several places. For example, “Although to much extent I agree” is an incomplete clause, “it have” should be “it has,” and “these parks provides” should be “these parks provide.” The sentence beginning “Because city life…” is also a fragment, while “every street have” has a subject–verb agreement error. Practise building complete sentences and checking each subject against its verb; this will improve accuracy while preserving your attempts at complex structures.

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