Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays, the shortage of housing has become a major issue in many large cities. Some people believe that constructing tall apartment buildings is the most effective way to provide sufficient homes for the growing population. I partly agree with this view because high-rise buildings can accommodate more people, although other housing solutions are also necassary.

To begin with, the major advantage of living in high-rise buildings that it provides large amount of people in less space of land such as living in homes, One family needs one home for their privacy concerns but in apartment they require only one apartment it gives them privacy and saves the land also. On the other side it also helps in living life with multipes resources. Moreover it reduces pressure on available land also apartments are more cheaper than buying own house for middle class families apartments are the best way of living standard life in low budget. In addition apartments also help families with hospitality and transport.

Furthermore apartment gives more security to families as compared to own houses. More facilities such as parking,lifts and privacy. Although creation of apartments also helps in agriculture. Farmers can use more land for natural life.

Moreover schools, hospitals and offices can be create on available land which also helps people and country economy. Families can use latest transport for travelling purposes which saves their time and money. However it can be effective for people all essantials.

In my prespective living in apartments would save the land for commercial and agricultural goods which will be effective for country economy. Moreover living in apartments gives us more facilities than living in own houses.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You take a partly agreeing position in the introduction and return to the benefits of apartments in the conclusion, so the response is relevant to the question. You also give several reasons, including using less land, providing security and facilities, and leaving space for agriculture and public services. However, the position is not fully sustained: the essay gives little explanation of why tall blocks are the best way to provide enough homes, and it does not develop a clear alternative or limitation despite saying other solutions are necessary. Some claims, such as apartments helping with “hospitality and transport,” are unclear or unsupported. Develop fewer points with specific explanations or examples, and explain what housing solutions should complement high-rise buildings.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, body paragraphs and a conclusion, and signposts such as “To begin with,” “Furthermore” and “However” show an attempt to guide the reader. However, the ideas do not progress in a clear sequence: the first body paragraph moves from land use to privacy, resources, cost and transport, while the next combines security, facilities, agriculture, schools and the economy. Some linking phrases do not show a clear relationship between ideas, and “However it can be effective for people all essantials” is difficult to connect to the preceding point. Group related reasons into focused paragraphs, use transitions only where the relationship is clear, and make references such as “it” and “they” unambiguous.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “shortage of housing,” “high-rise buildings,” “available land,” “agriculture” and “commercial,” which helps communicate the general subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unclear, sometimes making the intended meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “multipes resources,” “living standard life,” “helps families with hospitality,” and “commercial and agricultural goods.” Spelling errors such as “necassary,” “essantials” and “prespective” also reduce accuracy. Aim for precise phrases that express the intended point—for example, distinguish between facilities, services and transport—and check spelling and word forms during revision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences and use clauses introduced by “because,” “although” and “which,” but the range is limited and complex constructions are often faulty. For example, “the major advantage … that it provides” is missing a verb, and “More facilities such as parking,lifts and privacy” is a sentence fragment. There are also recurring problems with articles, agreement and sentence boundaries, as in “a large amount of people,” “apartments … is the best way,” and the run-on sentence beginning “On the other side it also helps.” These errors can make relationships between ideas hard to follow. Practise building complete sentences with one main clause, then add subordinate clauses carefully; check agreement, articles and punctuation.

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