Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The better way to provide sufficient houses in big cities area is to make tall acomodation blocks. So, i totally agree with this view. The maximum number of peoples live in large cities Therefore, homes are building is necessary part of human living.

We are know that canada is a largest countries, and in this country lots of multicultral individual lives. Multiculture like hindu, muslim, sikh, panjabi. Moreover, differnt culture eat different food and also different language. peoples are wear many types of clothes. For example, if peoples dont have home so they cannot afford food, clothes.. home is important role in human life. like aparment is good for all types of people because apartment in different types of blocks available. And this blocks in lots of room are available and also all facilities provided by owner of apartment.

Furtheremore, japan, china and usa like many countries in maximum numbers of students come for study. however they need to live in apartment, it is affordable. and this is more useful for international students because they dont have more money to pay for own home. Therefore, apartments like parts in home is good for all graduation child. For instance, some of students are living together so they easily pay rent.That's mean all the college students divided the rent.also its affordable in food and grocery.Therefore i totally agree with large cities are making rise apartment its usefull all students, people, children old people everyone for useful. And many apartments provide gym facilities so its good for old and young people.

In conclusion, if we are making lots of apartment hence people live easily and enjoyly.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

Your position is clear from the opening: “I totally agree,” and you give relevant reasons, including the affordability of apartments for students and the possibility of shared rent. However, the response only partially develops the central claim about whether tall apartment blocks are the best way to provide enough homes. The discussion of Canada’s cultural diversity, clothing and food does not clearly explain how high-rise construction addresses housing demand, and the point about gym facilities is also only loosely connected. Examples are mostly general rather than explained or supported. To strengthen the response, focus each body paragraph on a direct benefit of building upwards—such as accommodating more residents on limited land—and explain how that benefit helps solve shortages in large cities, while acknowledging any limitation if appropriate.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is a basic overall structure: an introduction states your view, the body gives examples, and a conclusion repeats your agreement. Linking expressions such as “Moreover,” “Furthermore,” and “For instance” show an effort to connect ideas. However, progression is not consistently clear: the paragraph moves from cultural differences to basic needs, apartment facilities and then students, without a clear sequence of supporting points. Some links are mechanical or do not show the relationship between ideas, as in “Therefore” before the claim about apartments being useful for students. The conclusion is very brief and does not draw together the main reasons. Organise the body into focused paragraphs, each with one main point, and use clear references and transitions to show how each example supports your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use a basic range of topic-related vocabulary, including “apartment,” “rent,” “international students,” and “facilities,” so the general subject is usually identifiable. However, vocabulary is repetitive and often imprecise, which sometimes makes the intended meaning difficult to follow. For example, “homes are building is necessary part of human living” and “apartments like parts in home” do not express the ideas naturally. There are also frequent spelling and word-form errors, including “acomodation,” “multicultral,” “differnt,” and “usefull.” Aim to learn accurate collocations for housing and urban development, and check spelling and word forms. More precise terms such as “high-rise buildings,” “housing supply,” and “accommodate residents” would help you explain your argument clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and the reader can generally identify your overall opinion. However, the range of structures is limited, and attempts to combine ideas often contain errors that make the relationships unclear. Examples include “We are know that Canada is a largest countries,” “homes are building is necessary,” and “if we are making lots of apartment hence people live easily.” These show problems with verb forms, articles, agreement and sentence construction. Punctuation also needs attention: several sentences begin with lowercase letters, and full stops and commas are sometimes missing or misplaced. Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add subordinate clauses with connectors such as “because” or “although.” Proofread each sentence for a clear subject and correctly formed verb.

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