Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is often agrue that modern skyscrapper buildings are spacies for number of houses in developed areas. I entirely disagree with this assertion because cities become more crowded and rapidly increase air pollution and noise pollution.

First and foremost, build appartments in urban area become more crowded with people, because thosand of residents are living in tall buildings rather than living in countryside,so no open area for parks and play ground. However all area coverd with modern and large buildings. For exmaple, Dheli is well-known place in India but all area covered with ressidencail apperatments and houses and small areas provide for parks and outdoor activites. As a result, nowdays mostly childrens are playing video games and watching Tv all the time becuse parks and playgrounds are in a open and large place.

Futhermore,after tall buidings for homes in cities can increase air pollution and noise pollution because in big cities people are daily travel by private and public vehicle for office, school or collage and for other reasons which are make air more polluted and vehicle horns create a noise pollution. For instance, Mumbai is a biggest and modern city but according to a research survey this is more air polluted and congested as compare to Chandigradh there have clean air and peaceful area. consquently, take a breath in toxic air can be harmful for human kedneys which caused dangoures deaseases.

In conclusion,I firmly believe that provide multiple houses in a tall appartment mainly in cities which make living area more congested and noisy but also increse air pollution

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear: you entirely disagree, and the conclusion restates that tall apartments can make cities more congested, noisy and polluted. You also give relevant examples, including Delhi’s limited park space and the contrast between Mumbai and Chandigarh. However, the response only partly addresses the central question of whether tall apartment blocks are the best way to provide enough homes. Most of the discussion explains disadvantages of dense urban living, rather than comparing this approach with alternatives or showing how it affects housing supply and affordability. The claims about children’s activities and pollution also need clearer links to the housing proposal. Develop each reason with a more direct explanation and a specific, well-supported example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs signalled by “First and foremost” and “Furthermore,” and a conclusion. Each body paragraph focuses on a main concern, which helps the reader follow the argument. Some connections, however, are mechanical or unclear. For example, the first paragraph moves from crowding and parks to children playing video games without fully explaining the link, while the second shifts from commuting to pollution and health effects. Several sentences are joined in ways that make relationships difficult to follow, and the conclusion repeats the main points without clearly synthesising them. Use clearer topic sentences and connect each example explicitly to the reason it supports.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “air pollution,” “congested,” “residential apartments,” and “outdoor activities.” These choices show an effort to discuss urban issues, but the range is limited and many spelling and word-choice errors make parts of the response difficult to read, such as “agrue,” “spacies,” “apperatments,” and “dangoures deaseases.” Some phrases are also unnatural, including “provide multiple houses in a tall appartment” and “take a breath in toxic air.” Aim for accurate, natural collocations and check spelling carefully. Reusing a smaller set of precise terms—such as housing supply, high-density development, green space, and traffic emissions—would make the argument clearer and more appropriate for this topic.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including explanations with “because” and examples introduced by “For example” and “For instance.” However, complex structures are often faulty, and frequent errors in sentence formation, agreement, articles, and verb forms sometimes make the meaning hard to follow. For example, “build appartments in urban area become more crowded” lacks a clear grammatical structure, and “which are make air more polluted” has an incorrect verb construction. There are also run-on sentences and inconsistent punctuation, particularly around introductory linking phrases. Practise building accurate subject–verb sentences first, then add subordinate clauses, checking that each clause has a clear subject and correctly formed verb.

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