Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Across the world, large cities are facing problems to cater to the increasing demand of housing. One solution that is being given is to build tall aprtments. I think it is a good idea because large apartments can accomodate higher number of people in less space but there are some people who disagree with this on the basis of seismic activity and high congestion of traffic on roads.

The idea of building tall apartments has been there for a while and many cities across the world has adopted it to accomodate the housing demand of its citizens. One of the example is Hong Kong-on the of the most densely populated region of the world- which has accomodated the housing demands of its citizens through high rise apartments. If cities has a space problem, than high rise apartments is the only viable solution because it provide housing to a large number of citizens within close proximity of the city limits. Many major cities around the world has successfully implemented this plan.

But on the other hand some people do not agree with this solution. They say a high number of high rise buildings would pressure on the underlying rock in the earth's core. If it broke down, this would result in an earthquake thus risking the lives of alot of people. Moreover, high rise buildings result in a concentration of alot people in one place and this cause alot of other problems like heavy traffic and noise pollution.

In conclusion, the idea of constructing large apartments to fulfill the housing demands is a good idea. This will work only if the problems caused by high rise buliding are solved.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear: you support tall apartment blocks as a way to house more people in limited urban space, while acknowledging concerns about seismic risk, traffic and noise. The Hong Kong example is relevant and helps illustrate your main point. This addresses the question, but the discussion is unevenly developed. The benefits are asserted rather than explained in detail, and the claim that high-rises are “the only viable solution” is too absolute without support. The opposing concerns are also introduced but not examined or weighed against the benefits. To strengthen the response, explain how high-rise housing compares with alternatives and develop one or two examples showing when it works or what safeguards are needed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The essay has a clear overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph supporting high-rise housing, a paragraph presenting concerns, and a conclusion. The progression from your position to the counterargument is easy to follow, and signposts such as “But on the other hand” and “In conclusion” make the stages visible. This is a coherent arrangement, with some effective paragraphing. However, connections between individual claims are sometimes abrupt: the discussion moves from pressure on rock to earthquakes, then to traffic and noise, without explaining the links or distinguishing the issues. Repeated references to “high rise apartments” also make the flow feel somewhat mechanical. Use clearer referencing and transitions that show how each example supports or qualifies your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough topic vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “housing demand,” “densely populated,” “high rise apartments,” and “noise pollution.” These choices show some awareness of the subject and are generally understandable. However, the range is limited by repeated wording such as “high rise apartments,” “a lot,” and “problems,” while several collocations or word forms are inaccurate: “problems to cater to,” “pressure on the underlying rock,” and “housing demands” could be expressed more naturally. Spelling errors such as “aprtments,” “accomodate,” and “buliding” also reduce accuracy. Build a wider set of precise phrases for housing supply, urban density and infrastructure, and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including a conditional structure in “If cities has a space problem…” and a contrastive sentence beginning “but there are some people who disagree.” The overall meaning remains clear, and the essay has some sentence variety. However, errors in agreement, articles and sentence construction recur. For example, “many cities … has adopted” should use a plural verb, and “If cities has” has the same agreement problem. In “a high number of high rise buildings would pressure,” the verb pattern is incomplete; a more grammatical form would be “would put pressure on.” There are also missing or incorrect articles and punctuation around the Hong Kong example. Review subject–verb agreement and practise checking each sentence for a complete, natural grammatical pattern.

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