Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In large cities is to build tall apartment blocks best way to provide enough homes because it saves the land area to make more tall apartment blocks on same location where have all necessary needs and more people's live in cities area to access all necessary needs they have in daily life.

I agree with this statement because people they wants better life and future for their childern to moves cities side area to access all necessary needs they have in daily life. Parents move cities side to provide good education to their children for better future. They acess many opportunity in cities area for their future and help to learn new technologies fast. People's complete their education from top ranking institute rather than others or gain good experience in their life. In cities you goes to shopping mall, markets and other destination areas easily and save your time and money.On weekends you go park with your family and spent your time together help to make more memories and enjoyment in your life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You state a relevant position—“I agree with this statement”—and mention that tall buildings can save land, while city living offers access to education and services. However, the response only minimally addresses the question: most of the supporting points explain why people move to cities, rather than showing why tall apartment blocks are the best way to provide enough homes or considering alternatives. The ideas are brief and lack specific examples or explanation. The response also contains 164 words, so it does not meet the 250-word minimum; 9 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. To strengthen your answer, explain how high-rise housing increases capacity, support this with a relevant example, and develop your position with a clear qualification or counterargument.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic line of thought: the opening mentions saving land, and the next paragraph gives reasons people may prefer city life. However, the ideas are not arranged into a clear argument about the proposed housing solution. The second paragraph moves from education to technology, shopping, and weekend activities without showing how these points support the claim about apartment blocks. The response also has no concluding paragraph to restate your view. Use separate paragraphs for your position, supporting reasons, and conclusion, and connect each example explicitly to the question. Linking phrases such as “As a result” or “For example” can help show relationships, but the main priority is a logical progression of relevant ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-relevant vocabulary, including “tall apartment blocks,” “land area,” “education,” and “technologies,” so the reader can identify the general subject. However, the range is limited and several phrases are repeated, particularly “necessary needs” and “cities area.” Some word choices or forms make meaning less natural, such as “cities side area” and “many opportunity.” Spelling errors in “childern” and “acess” also reduce accuracy. Build a more precise range for discussing housing and urban planning, and check collocations and spelling. For instance, describe the effect of high-rise housing on “urban land use” or “housing capacity,” rather than relying on general statements about city services.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to express reasons using longer sentences, but sentence structures are very limited and errors are frequent enough to make some parts difficult to follow. The opening, “In large cities is to build tall apartment blocks best way,” lacks a clear grammatical subject and article. Other examples include “people they wants” and “Parents move cities side,” where agreement and sentence patterns are not controlled. The final sentence also shifts between “you go” and “spent,” creating inconsistent verb forms. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with clauses using “because” or “which.” Check subject–verb agreement, articles, and consistent tense, and use full stops to prevent long, unclear sentences.

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