Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In the modern era, accommodation become a significant aspect of human life. The appropriate method to provide enough homes in develop cities is to counstruct tall building which contain separate flats. I strongly believe that this approach make a huge difference in accommodation industary which provide different facilities to people related to living things.

Firstly, build a tall apartments to provide living flats to people is more beneficial because these building counstruct varticaly, so these cannot occupie wide range of land. Most developed cities face shortage of land because individuals refer live in a big city rather than rural areas due to the facilities. Moreover, to address this problem, govt spend a lot of money to build large apartments.For example, Bubai made a world largest building which is know as Burj Khalifa, this building covered a noticable portion of city population which offer accommodation aminities to peoples. Therefore, largest building cannot hold large area of land and provide accomodation to numerous individuals.

Numerous facilities are paly a crucial role in local families. In addition, schools, hospital and government departments are available in a develope city, as a result most people prefer to live their life in large cities because they have no need to go to other city for a specific task. For instance, Lahore is a famous and largest city in Pakistan, this citiy hold almost all living things which is essential for life. Therefore, vartical buildings are counstrut rather than make horizontal because seprate houses obtain large oprtion of land.

To conclude, although sperate houses is important but flats in a building are far more significant. From my perspactive, building tall apartments blocks to cover individuals living place is more baneficial as they offer numerous aminities.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear: you strongly support tall apartment blocks, and the response stays focused on housing in large cities. You give relevant reasons, especially that vertical construction uses less land, and you refer to Dubai and Lahore as examples. However, the discussion only partly develops the task. The Dubai example is presented as evidence that one building accommodates many people, but the link to providing enough homes across a city is not explained. The Lahore paragraph mainly lists urban facilities, which supports why people move to cities rather than directly showing why tall blocks are the best housing solution. Develop each reason with a clearer explanation and a more specific example, and acknowledge a limitation or alternative to make the argument more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and the main position is easy to identify. Sequencing words such as “Firstly,” “Moreover,” “For example” and “To conclude” help signal the stages of the argument. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear: the discussion moves from land shortages to government spending and then to the Burj Khalifa without fully connecting these points. The second body paragraph shifts to schools and hospitals, so its relationship to the claim about tall buildings needs to be made explicit. Some linking phrases, including repeated “Therefore” and “In addition,” feel mechanical. Use clearer topic sentences and refer back to the central claim as you explain each example.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-relevant vocabulary, including “shortage of land,” “accommodation,” “facilities” and “population,” which helps communicate the subject. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation and spelling problems make parts of the response difficult to read. Examples include “accommodation industary,” “living things” where you mean essential services or amenities, and “covered a noticable portion of city population.” Repeated use of “building,” “city” and “people” also limits precision. Aim to learn common housing collocations and check spelling carefully; for example, describe apartment blocks as “high-rise residential buildings” and say they “house a large number of residents.” More accurate, varied phrasing would make your ideas clearer and more natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “because,” “as a result” and “although.” This shows an effort to connect ideas, but control is inconsistent, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to follow. For example, “accommodation become a significant aspect” has a subject–verb agreement error, while “I strongly believe that this approach make” also needs agreement. Other sentences have faulty construction, such as “Firstly, build a tall apartments … is more beneficial” and “Numerous facilities are paly a crucial role.” Articles, plurals and sentence boundaries also need attention. Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add subordinate clauses and check agreement and punctuation.

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