Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Nowadays, accommodation is the major problem in many countries. The main cause of this problem is over population. With the passage of time, there is a significant increase in population that lead to the problem of accommodation. Government should takr steps to provide enough homes to people so that they can easily live there. Some people says the best way is construct high buildings in big cities to provide homes. I strongly agree with this statement that it is a good way to provide accommodation to people. Firstly, when we build tall apartment blocks it take less place and build many short flats at one place. By making large houses that takes more place and few member lives in large houses. As a result, this problem increase day by day. In addition, Construct the m

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You state a clear position—“I strongly agree”—and give a relevant reason: tall blocks use less land and can provide many flats. However, the response addresses the question only partially. The explanation is brief, and the comparison with large houses is not developed into a clear, supported argument. The final sentence is cut off (“In addition, Construct the m…”), so a second reason or conclusion is not provided. The response also falls 115 words short of the required minimum, leaving too little space to explain your ideas and include relevant examples. To improve, develop at least two reasons, explain how each supports your view, and add a specific example, such as how apartment construction can increase housing capacity in a densely populated city.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic line of thought: you introduce housing as a problem, state your agreement, and begin a reason with “Firstly” and “As a result.” These signals help the reader identify the direction of the argument. However, the response does not progress into a complete essay: there are no developed body paragraphs or conclusion, and it ends mid-sentence. Some links are also unclear; for example, the contrast between “large houses” and “few member lives” needs a clearer explanation of how it supports the point about apartment blocks. Organise the response into an introduction, separate paragraphs for reasons, and a conclusion. Use linking phrases to show relationships between complete ideas rather than relying on a few basic connectors.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the general subject, including “accommodation,” “population,” “tall apartment blocks,” and “provide homes.” This shows a basic ability to discuss housing, but the range is limited and some expressions are inaccurate or repetitive, which can make the meaning less clear. For instance, “over population” is not the standard form, and “build many short flats” does not clearly express the intended idea. “Accommodation” and “provide homes” recur without much variation. Aim for more precise collocations such as “housing shortage,” “high-rise apartments,” and “increase housing capacity.” Check spelling and word forms carefully, and choose phrases that express the intended comparison directly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including a cause-and-effect sentence beginning “With the passage of time” and a reason introduced by “As a result.” However, control is uneven, and errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence construction are frequent enough to affect clarity. Examples include “population that lead” instead of a correctly agreed verb, “Some people says,” and “when we build tall apartment blocks it take.” The sentence beginning “By making large houses” is also structurally unclear, while the final sentence is incomplete. Practise checking subject–verb agreement and ensuring each sentence has a complete main clause. Build accuracy with clear simple sentences before adding more complex structures.

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