Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-12
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
One effective way to provide sufficient housing in large urban areas is to construct high rise apartment buildings . I completely agree with this statement because these building provide accommodation for many people and save the land.
Firstly, one important reason why i agree is that tall apartment buildings provide accommodation for many people because there are many floors in these buildings . for example one high rise buildings provide home for many families in the same areas.
Furthermore, why i agree is that high rise buildings can save the land in large urban areas because many families can live in one building so less land is needed for housing . for example more space available for parks and others public facilities.
In conclusion ,i believe that tall apartment buildings are a good solution because they provide homes for many people and use less land.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
Your position is clear: you completely agree that tall apartment blocks can help provide housing, and you give two relevant reasons—accommodating many families and using less land. However, the response addresses the task only minimally. Both body paragraphs repeat the same basic points, and the examples (“one high rise buildings provide home for many families” and “more space available for parks”) are brief rather than explained or supported. The response is also 105 words below the required minimum, which leaves too little space to develop your reasoning. To strengthen your answer, explain how high-rise housing meets demand in crowded cities, add a specific example, and consider a limitation or alternative before reaffirming your position.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. The ideas are presented in a generally understandable order, and signposts such as “Firstly,” “Furthermore,” and “In conclusion” help show the stages of your argument. However, progression within the body paragraphs is limited because each mainly restates the claim rather than developing it. Some linking is also mechanical, particularly the repeated “why I agree,” and the examples are not connected to further explanation. Build each paragraph around one distinct point, then explain its effect and link the example back to the question. This would make the organisation feel more developed and less repetitive.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “sufficient housing,” “high rise apartment buildings,” “accommodation,” and “urban areas,” so the main ideas are clear. However, the range is narrow and several words or phrases are repeated, especially “buildings,” “many people,” and “land.” Some combinations are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “save the land,” “one high rise buildings,” and “others public facilities.” Choose more precise expressions and vary your wording—for example, refer to “housing capacity,” “limited urban land,” or “public amenities.” A broader set of topic-specific terms would help you explain the issue more precisely while keeping your meaning clear.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
You communicate your main points using mostly simple sentence patterns, and the opening and conclusion are understandable. There are also attempts to connect clauses with “because,” which gives some variety. However, control is inconsistent: “these building provide” has a plural agreement error, while “one high rise buildings provide” combines a singular determiner with a plural noun and verb. The example fragment “for example more space available” also lacks a finite verb. Capitalisation and punctuation need attention, including “i” and the spacing around commas and full stops. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, complete example sentences, and a wider mix of sentence structures to make the argument smoother.
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