Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

There is no denying the fact that, nowadays people think the best way to build tall apartment blocks for provide enough homes in large cities, which is help people to afford their desairable home. I strongly agree with both views and will balance between the two mathodes in the best approach.

On the one hand, urban area has not enough place for house or saparete home for every person, so that people buy flat like apartment blocks. However, in the cities we can see there are lots of apartment blocks are built for home , so many people who has not any place for build there home or house they can easily buy this tipe of apartment blocks. For instance, today people are really fashioneted about city life everyone want to live there but they can not afford a place where they form their house, so that they intarested about tall building apartment blocks which is really affordable.

On the other hand, it has some doawbacks when apartment blocks are really affordable everyone intend to buy it, but some time it is harmfull for our children and old age persons. Not only that, in cities there are lack of sports place, park, greenary and so on, every where are pollution,traffic and other disadvantages available which are not suitable for our helth and mind. Such as, when we live in country side there are lots of greenarry fresh air big fild for sports also in school big play ground are available for children and pld age people are looks really healthy and cure.

I believe, for enough home large cities build tall apartment blocks is important for which people who dose not have enough place for their home, and it is true it carry some drowbacks which is not so muchfor every type of people.

To sum up, tall apartmenet blocks people to afford desiarable home and get a happy life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You give a clear general view that you agree with building tall apartment blocks, and you include relevant points about limited urban space, affordability, and the need for green areas. The examples about people wanting city life and the contrast with the countryside help show your thinking. However, the response only partly develops the question of whether this is the best way to provide enough homes. The drawbacks paragraph focuses mainly on health and recreation, without explaining whether other housing approaches could also help or how the benefits compare with these costs. Your conclusion repeats the main view but does not resolve this balance clearly. To strengthen the response, explain your position consistently and develop each main reason with a clearer explanation or specific example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting contrasting points, and a conclusion. The signposts “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “To sum up” help readers identify these sections. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow, and links between ideas can feel mechanical. For example, the first body paragraph moves from limited space to apartment availability and then to people’s interest in city life without clearly showing how each point supports the argument. Some references, such as “both views,” are unclear because the two views have not been defined. Use topic sentences that state each paragraph’s main point, then connect explanations and examples explicitly.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “apartment blocks,” “affordable,” “pollution,” and “greenery,” and you attempt to express ideas about urban living and health. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate word choices, collocations, and spelling errors make parts of the response difficult to understand. Examples include “fashioneted about city life,” “some doawbacks,” and “carry some drowbacks”; these do not communicate the intended meaning naturally. Repetition of “home,” “people,” and “apartment blocks” also limits precision. Build a bank of accurate housing and urban-planning expressions, and check spelling and word forms. Prefer familiar, correctly used vocabulary over ambitious phrases whose meaning is unclear.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “so that” and “when,” but control is inconsistent. Errors in sentence structure, agreement, articles, and verb forms occur frequently and sometimes make the meaning hard to follow. For example, “urban area has not enough place” and “everyone want to live there” show problems with articles and subject–verb agreement, while “there are lots of apartment blocks are built” combines two sentence patterns incorrectly. The final sentence, “tall apartmenet blocks people to afford,” is also missing a clear grammatical structure. Practise building accurate basic sentences first, then add subordinate clauses. Check each sentence for a clear subject and verb, and use punctuation to separate complete ideas.

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