Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.It is often argued that build tall apartments instead of providing enough home in large cities.While i partially agree with this view because this not only the best solution to save our expenditures but another advantage is that to save our land.

On the one hand i am entirely agree with this solution to build tall apartment block because they more helpful to save our land. Moreover, when we build aparments in large cities like in Lahore,Karachi and Islamabad in this the land was more expensive and not easy for everyone to buy.So it is completely benefical for us or goverment to provide essential amount of water, food and electricity instead of we provide enough home they would become a source of food,water,and electricity shortage. In apartmens a large number of families living in there and apartments are build in small area or the other land will become a souce sustainable agriculture .

However, building tall apartments in large cities would become a source of strong economy graph in our country, because when the expenditures was layed down autuomaticaly we should invest it on the other benefical sources.

Moreover, tall buildings alone cannot solve the housing problems. If the aprtments are poorly degigned they would become a source of overcrowding, lack of privacy and social isolation.

In conclusion, tall buildings in large cities is a best way to save our land or expenditures but we are ensure that these apartments will be designed well where no lack of privacy,social isolation and overlcrowd will happened.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You give a relevant, partly qualified position: tall apartments can conserve land and reduce some costs, but poor design may cause overcrowding, limited privacy and isolation. These points address the question, and the examples of Lahore, Karachi and Islamabad help ground the discussion. However, the position is not consistently expressed: the opening says you “partially agree,” while the first body paragraph says you “entirely agree.” The economic argument is also unclear, and the claim that apartments would help provide water, food and electricity is not explained. Develop the reasons with clearer cause-and-effect links and a specific example, and state one consistent view throughout. The response meets the task’s length requirement; 16 words copied from the prompt were not counted.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, supporting paragraphs, a counterpoint and a conclusion. “On the one hand” and “However” signal a shift in direction, and the final paragraph returns to the central issue of land use and apartment design. However, progression between ideas is uneven: the first body paragraph moves from land costs to utilities and then agriculture without clearly connecting these points. The separate paragraph about the economy is brief and does not develop its relationship to the main argument. Some linking phrases, including repeated “Moreover,” feel mechanical, while references such as “in this” are unclear. Group related reasons together, use transitions that show the precise relationship between ideas, and make each paragraph’s main point explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “overcrowding,” “privacy,” “social isolation,” “expenditures” and “sustainable agriculture.” This gives you a basic range for discussing housing and its effects. However, vocabulary is often repetitive or imprecise, and several word combinations make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “save our expenditures,” “a source of strong economy graph” and “essential amount of water” do not express the intended ideas naturally. Spelling errors such as “aparments,” “benefical” and “overlcrowd” also reduce accuracy. Build a more precise set of housing and urban-planning expressions, check spelling carefully, and choose collocations that clearly describe costs, infrastructure and economic effects.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including a conditional structure in “If the aprtments are poorly degigned…” and a contrast introduced by “However.” This shows an effort to vary sentence forms. However, control is inconsistent, and errors in sentence construction, verb forms, agreement, articles and punctuation sometimes make the reader work to understand the point. Examples include “It is often argued that build tall apartments,” “i am entirely agree,” and “when the expenditures was layed down.” Several sentences also run together without appropriate spacing or punctuation, particularly in the opening and first body paragraph. Practise forming complete clauses, checking subject–verb agreement and verb patterns, and separating sentences clearly. Accurate simpler sentences will make your more complex ideas easier to follow.

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