Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

provide enough home is to

build tall apartment blocks.

Nowadays,the population of cities is increasing largerly at this period.Its creates a serious issues.Some people believe that building tall apartment blocks will slove this problem. I agree in this statement because of land we can not provide all the facilities.

Firstly, Building tall apartment blocks takes more space.And we know,we can not afford land because its expensive.for instance in Kathmandu,we all know that people were coming to urban areas for education, employment,and going board for futher studies.

Secondly , Another important points that is water supplies .The reason for this statement in cities there are all facilities that we can not get in our village. Morevoer ,there is too noise sounds of vehicle .The demonstrate that it will give facilities in future more.

In conclusion, Although building tall apartment bolcks is important and its firmly believe that it gives all the opportunity to cities life in a perfect way .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You state a position—“I agree”—and attempt to give reasons, including land costs, migration to Kathmandu, water supply and transport noise. However, the response addresses the question only minimally: it does not clearly explain how tall apartment blocks provide enough homes, and several points are unclear or not connected to the claim. For example, “we can not afford land because its expensive” could support high-rise construction, but the explanation is not developed. The discussion of water supplies and vehicle noise does not establish whether these are advantages or disadvantages. The conclusion repeats a general claim rather than summarising supported reasons. The response is also 91 words below the required minimum, leaving too little space to develop relevant examples and reasoning. Explain your position directly and support each reason with a clear example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic essay shape, with an opening, two body paragraphs introduced by “Firstly” and “Secondly,” and a conclusion. These markers help the reader recognise the intended sections. However, ideas do not progress clearly within or between paragraphs. The first body paragraph moves from land and cost to migration and education without explaining the connection. The second begins with water supplies, then shifts to village facilities and traffic noise, so its central point is difficult to follow. Linking phrases such as “The reason for this statement” and “The demonstrate that” do not clarify the relationships between claims. Aim for one main idea per paragraph, explain it in a logical sequence, and use pronouns and transitions only when their references are clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “population,” “urban areas,” “employment,” “facilities” and “water supplies,” which gives the response a basic connection to city housing. However, the range is limited, and repeated general words such as “important,” “problem” and “facilities” make the argument imprecise. Several spelling and word-choice errors may cause difficulty, including “slove,” “largerly,” “futher,” “Morevoer” and “bolcks.” Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “too noise sounds of vehicle” and “going board for futher studies.” Build a more accurate set of housing-related expressions, such as “high-density housing,” “limited land,” and “accommodate a growing population.” Check spelling and collocations carefully so your intended meaning is easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, for example, “Some people believe that building tall apartment blocks will slove this problem.” However, the range is narrow, and errors in sentence structure, agreement, articles and punctuation occur frequently enough to make parts difficult to follow. Examples include “Its creates a serious issues,” “Nowadays,the population,” and “I agree in this statement.” The sentence beginning “The reason for this statement in cities…” lacks a clear grammatical structure, while the conclusion also has an incomplete construction: “Although building tall apartment bolcks is important and its firmly believe…” Practise forming complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check singular/plural agreement, articles and punctuation. Use a few controlled complex sentences rather than joining several unclear ideas.

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