Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

it is often argued that provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartments blocks.i completely agree with this view provide good appartments because their design are very unique and the other reason, is the houses are much little in the country a large builing made the solutions of all problem.

one compelling,reason is that in the urabn areas there are many houses around there.this is because we can arrange a big appartment all the people easily lived there for example,population are dramatically increasing from time to time we could not mange therefore the concentration of the people are very large day by day we make a big appartments in same earth that people make our houses.

another significant argument is the many apparment made then all the people there.in contrast,apparments much give shorter space as compared to home.its a big advantage for those peoples whose live in a blocks.all the appartment are fully furnished.for instance the people who lived in a houses were not comfortable take a long space but in this case they will live easily dont having any problem.good construction work will play postive feeback on our papulation.our government will provide all the benefits as soon as posible.

in conclusion,it is argued that people lived more comfortable in the appartment.and the other reason have completely agree is that the appartmebt much give little space this is postive reason and the majority of the home will decreased and our goverment will follow this pattern as soon as possible.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You state a clear position—“i completely agree”—and give reasons related to accommodating a growing urban population and using less space. However, these points are only minimally explained, and some claims are difficult to interpret, such as “the houses are much little in the country” and “the majority of the home will decreased.” The response also does not fully explain why tall apartment blocks are the best way to provide enough homes, or consider relevant limitations. The required minimum is not met: the response contains 242 words, and 10 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. Develop each reason with a clear explanation and a specific example, and ensure the response reaches the required length.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and phrases such as “one compelling reason,” “another significant argument” and “in conclusion” signal the intended structure. However, progression within paragraphs is difficult to follow because several ideas are joined without clear relationships. For example, the first body paragraph moves from the number of houses to population growth and then to building apartments, without explaining each link. Connectors such as “in contrast” introduce a contrast that is not clearly developed, and repeated references to “the people” and “appartments” do not always make the meaning precise. Use shorter, logically connected sentences and make each paragraph develop one main point from claim to explanation and example.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt some topic-related vocabulary, including “urban areas,” “population,” “concentration” and “fully furnished,” and use phrases such as “compelling reason” to introduce an argument. However, the range is basic and repetitive, with frequent spelling and word-choice problems that make parts of the response hard to understand. Examples include “appartments,” “urabn,” “mange,” and “postive,” as well as unclear expressions such as “made the solutions of all problem” and “positive feedback on our population.” Some words do not express the intended idea precisely; for instance, “concentration” is not a clear substitute for the number or density of residents. Build a bank of accurate housing and urban-planning terms, and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with reasons and examples, including a sentence beginning “this is because” and one using “for instance.” However, sentence structures are often incomplete or inaccurately joined, and errors in agreement, verb forms, articles and plurals occur throughout. For example, “provide enough homes … is to build” lacks a clear grammatical subject, while “their design are” has incorrect agreement and “population are dramatically increasing” uses an incorrect verb form. Punctuation and capitalisation are also inconsistent, making sentence boundaries unclear. Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add one subordinate clause at a time. Review agreement and articles, and use full stops to separate complete ideas.

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