Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The beneficial procedure for providing homes in large cities is to build tall apartement blocks for more surface area. This essay will disscuss about the negative and positive opinions on the statement.

In todays fast-faced world, population and construction is increased rapidly without any precautions. Therefore, tall apartements are build to provide enough ground area for people who live in cities. it will help us to provide a clear enviornment and make an decrease in conjusted areas. Tall apartements always catches attention of tourists and every induviual who live in specific country. This will help us economically and give us strong reputation for countrys relationships with others. Tall apartements are easier to design agriculturly and looks beatifull.

in contrast, Tall apartements are hard to build by labour as their is risk of falling from such heights. constructing tall apartments needs more many then our expectations beacause, heavy machienery is required to transfer material to the top where needed. Moreover, not every country or every induvisal is capable of having so much money. Another reason is that they are risky when earthquakes occuried there is a chance of falling down making threats to many lives.

In conclusion, tall apartements are always better for cities. They should be build under specific precautions and experienced egineers which will reduce the risk of getting lifes into threats.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a clear overall preference for tall apartment blocks, especially in the conclusion, and include relevant points about land use, construction costs, and earthquake risks. However, the opening says the essay will discuss both positive and negative opinions, so your position is not fully clear from the start, and several ideas are only briefly stated. For example, the claims that towers improve the environment and attract tourists are not explained or supported with examples. The response addresses the topic only partially and is 35 words below the required minimum; the eight words copied from the prompt are not counted. Develop fewer points in more detail, explain how they support your view, and maintain a consistent position throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable introduction, two body paragraphs presenting contrasting points, and a conclusion. Linking expressions such as “Therefore,” “Moreover,” and “In conclusion” help signal relationships between ideas. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear: the first body paragraph moves from land use to tourism, national reputation, and agricultural design without showing how these points connect. The contrast paragraph also combines labour risks, costs, affordability, and earthquakes with limited explanation. Capitalisation at the start of sentences is inconsistent, and the transition “in contrast” is not clearly set apart. Organise each paragraph around one main idea, use clearer links between supporting details, and ensure references and transitions guide the reader rather than simply announce a new point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “population,” “construction,” “precautions,” “heavy machinery,” and “earthquakes,” so the reader can follow the general subject. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate word choices or collocations make parts difficult to understand, such as “more surface area,” “clear environment,” and “agriculturly.” Spelling errors are also frequent, including “apartement,” “disscuss,” “conjusted,” and “induvial.” Some phrases, such as “strong reputation for countrys relationships,” do not express the intended meaning clearly. Build a more accurate set of phrases for urban housing and infrastructure, check spelling carefully, and choose words that precisely describe the point you want to make.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including a cause-and-effect sentence beginning “Therefore” and a conditional idea about precautions reducing risk. However, the range is limited, and frequent errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “population and construction is increased,” “Tall apartements are build,” and “Tall apartements always catches attention.” The sentence beginning “Another reason is that they are risky when earthquakes occuried” also needs clearer structure and punctuation. Practise forming accurate subject–verb combinations and past or passive forms, and check each sentence for a complete, clearly punctuated clause before adding more complex structures.

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