Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In recent years, there is one of the main concern is home because of the alot of people do not have their own home while their are living with their relatives. I completely agree with this perspective which Government should build tall apartment blocks for families to live separate to their relatives. It is a better to make alot of home in one building.

Their is the main issue for the maturity of the families is their own home because of their is shortage of home. So the families are living together in singel home which create alot of privacy issues. I've seen that kind of problem in my society there are so many families who are living together in singel home and they have face many problems related to their privacy. They all want their own separate home for better environment.

Following the concern of home the solution is to build tall apartment blocks in different areas of the country for the families to make their home. The tall apartments blocks would help to so many families for their separate home. The Government should work on that concern for better environment for families to live separately and make sure to protect their privacy. That is the best way to provide enough home to the families.

In conclusion, The tall apartments blocks is far better then one separate home for one family in one place. The Government should be notice on this view for enough home in large cities because the cities have so much population rather then rural areas.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear: you completely agree that tall apartment blocks can provide homes, and you connect this to families needing privacy and separate living space. The example from your society makes the concern relevant. However, the response only partly develops the question of whether this is the best way to provide enough homes in large cities. Most of the explanation repeats that apartments allow families to live separately, while benefits such as using limited urban land efficiently are not explained, and possible drawbacks or alternatives are not considered. The comparison in the conclusion with “one separate home for one family” is also unclear. Develop your main reason with a specific explanation or example, and make the link to housing supply in large cities explicit throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion. The ideas generally follow a sensible order, moving from the housing problem to apartment blocks as a solution, and phrases such as “In conclusion” help signal the final point. However, progression within the body paragraphs is limited because several sentences repeat the same claim about separate homes and privacy. Some links are mechanical or unclear, including “Following the concern of home,” and references such as “that concern” do not identify the point precisely. Improve cohesion by giving each paragraph a distinct purpose—for example, explain the urban housing shortage first, then show how high-rise buildings address it—and use clearer links between claims and supporting details.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “tall apartment blocks,” “shortage,” “privacy issues” and “population,” so the main subject is usually understandable. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, especially “home,” “families” and “separate.” There are also noticeable spelling and word-choice problems, such as “alot,” “singel,” “maturity of the families” and “make their home,” which make some ideas less natural or precise. Aim to use accurate collocations and vary key terms: for instance, refer to “housing” or “accommodation” rather than repeating “home,” and describe families as “living in overcrowded conditions” where appropriate. Check spelling carefully and choose phrases that express the intended meaning directly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to express reasons and connect clauses, but the range of sentence structures is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to follow. For example, “In recent years, there is one of the main concern is home” has an unclear clause structure, while “which create alot of privacy issues” does not agree with its subject. Other examples include “they have face many problems” and “The Government should be notice,” where verb forms or sentence patterns are faulty. Articles and plurals also need attention, as in “a better” and “enough home.” Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them using clauses such as “because” and “which.” Review subject–verb agreement, verb forms and article use.

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