Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In recent years, individuals believe that the most convenient way to supply homes in bigger suburbs is to build large apartment blocks. While other people argued that way at low-rise building is a most convenient to provide accommodation because it gives more and privacy. I strongly agree with the view that constructing tall apartment blocks is the most effective way to provide enough homes.

To begin with, one of main advantage of making apartments is to provide homes to low-income individuals. Some cannot buy homes because of their expensive prices. Government can construct affordable apartments due to this homeless families can get a safe place to live. In my opinion, government should have to open many schemes for underprivileged individuals. For instance, in these schemes especially poor people can take loans from banks and they can repay their loans according to their financial situation. Moreover, apartment can accommodate a large number of families in a limited area. This is because multiple families can live on different floors instead of constructing separate houses. As a result more land can be used for different facilities like hospitals, parking and schools etc.

Furthermore, living in low-rising building can enjoy their privacy. They do not have to share their common space. To illustrate that, parents can enjoy a peaceful life environment without being disturbed by neighbours. But in my opinion, if you will not be interacted with others, your children will be innocents because of this they can face many difficulties. In addition, individuals houses have private gardens in which children can play while parents can spend time outdoors.

To sum up, I convinced that apartment can supply homes to homeless people and urban lands can use for other things instead to making low-rising homes. On the other hand, suburbs have more privacy and can enjoy their time in gardens.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear in the introduction: you strongly support tall apartment blocks, and the response gives relevant reasons, including affordability and accommodating more families on limited land. You also acknowledge advantages of low-rise housing, such as privacy and gardens, so the discussion addresses both sides of the prompt. However, the support is uneven and some points are not fully explained. The proposed government loan schemes, for example, are not clearly connected to why tall blocks are the best way to increase housing supply. The claim that children may become “innocents” if they do not interact with others is also unclear and weakens the counterargument. Develop each main reason with a direct explanation or a specific example, and make the conclusion reinforce your position more decisively.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion. Paragraphing broadly separates the case for apartments from the benefits of low-rise homes, and linking expressions such as “To begin with,” “Moreover” and “To sum up” help signal stages in the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow: the discussion moves from affordable housing to loans, then land use, without clearly showing how each point supports the central argument. Some connections are also unclear, particularly the transition from children’s social development to private gardens. The conclusion introduces a contrast rather than clearly resolving it. Use topic sentences to establish each paragraph’s purpose, and make links between claims and examples explicit rather than relying mainly on transition phrases.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “low-income individuals,” “affordable apartments,” “limited area,” “privacy” and “private gardens.” These choices show an attempt to discuss housing and urban planning rather than relying entirely on basic terms. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unclear, such as “bigger suburbs,” “low-rising building,” “individuals houses” and “urban lands can use.” The phrase “your children will be innocents” does not communicate the intended idea clearly. Aim for more precise housing terminology and check whether words combine naturally; for example, use “high-rise apartment blocks,” “low-rise homes” and “urban land can be used.” This would make your arguments easier to understand and more convincing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a reason clause (“This is because multiple families can live on different floors”) and a conditional construction (“if you will not be interacted with others”). However, complex structures are often not controlled successfully, and errors in sentence formation, agreement, articles and verb forms sometimes make meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “While other people argued that way at low-rise building is a most convenient,” “Government can construct affordable apartments due to this homeless families can get,” and “urban lands can use.” The conditional sentence also needs a more natural structure, such as “If children do not interact with others, they may face difficulties.” Practise building accurate clauses and checking subject–verb agreement, articles and verb forms before adding more complex ideas.

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