Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In some countries, the government provide or allow only large buildings which contain flats to provide enough homes for all citizens. I am totally agree with this strategy of providing big building in form of flats to every citizens to overcome most of the issues in the area.

If the people build there homes on agriculture land or other usefull land and spread houses through the lands it can create a lot of issues like pollution, moreover if separate houses are constructed so it need initially to clear the area so all trees are vanished from the large site additionally it also effect the habitats of wild life e.g there is Margalla town in Islamabad then clear thousand of canals from plants, mountains etc so it effects habitat of different wild animals and as well as the temperature of the city elevated.

By constructing large buildings which have flats so it needs less area, so there is more area to plant the trees and do agriculture which have less burden then the environment, forexample in China they are building huge building and provide building apartments to the people so it can give more homes in small place for a large number of famillies and other countries like vietnam they are also following same startegies to cop with high population as well as with pollution.

In conclusion, it is the best way to provide the large apartments which have a lot of flats to the people to provide them a good space as well as controll on the pollution.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

Your position is clear: you strongly support tall apartment buildings, and you give relevant reasons, especially that they use less land and can help preserve trees and wildlife habitats. The examples of Islamabad, China and Vietnam also show an effort to support your view. This meets the task well, but the support is uneven: the environmental argument is developed more than the claim that apartments provide enough homes, and the country examples are asserted rather than explained. The reference to “Margalla town in Islamabad” is difficult to interpret, so clarify what happened and how it supports your point. To strengthen the response further, address a possible limitation of high-rise housing and explain why its benefits still outweigh it.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction states your view, two body paragraphs give reasons and examples, and a conclusion restates your position. This makes the main line of argument understandable. However, several sentences contain too many ideas, particularly the paragraph beginning “If the people build there homes,” where land use, tree loss, wildlife and temperature are joined together. Connectors such as “moreover,” “additionally” and “so” sometimes feel mechanical or do not clearly show the relationship between ideas. The example about Islamabad is also hard to follow, which weakens progression. Use clearer topic sentences, divide long sentences, and make each example’s link to the paragraph’s main point explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “agriculture land,” “habitats of wild life,” “pollution” and “population,” and you attempt more specific language such as “temperature of the city elevated.” This gives you enough range to communicate your main ideas, but word choice and spelling errors are noticeable and sometimes make meaning less clear. Examples include “usefull,” “famillies,” “startegies” and “cop,” as well as unnatural phrases such as “provide building apartments” and “good space.” Aim for accurate collocations and forms: for instance, say “provide apartments” and “accommodate a large number of families.” Proofreading spelling and choosing more natural phrases would make your argument clearer and more precise.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including conditional structures such as “If the people build…” and a reason clause beginning “so it can give…”. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors in agreement, articles, plurals and sentence construction occur throughout. For example, “the government provide” needs subject–verb agreement, while “I am totally agree” uses an incorrect verb pattern. In “so it need initially to clear the area,” the subject and structure are unclear; a clearer version would be “clearing the area is necessary.” Some sentences also run together without effective punctuation. Practise building shorter, accurate sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses and check agreement and verb forms.

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