Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The favourable way to give enough homes in big cities is to construct tall apartment sectors. Although it has few drawbacks, I completely agree with this statement because population are increasing day by day.

On the one hand, building tall apartments have few drawbacks when natural disaster occurs. For instance, in case of earthquack high buildings affect the most and they fall down in most of the cases. Furthermore, apartments are too congested and there are no separate space for extracurricular activities, such as for gardening. Therefore, it is not suitable for those individuals who are close to nature.

On the other hand, I completely agree having a tall apartment rooms because of increasing number of community especially in large cities. For example, there are not enough space in greater rushy areas and apartments are build here for provide services to society. Moreover, if every individual wants his separate home then no land left for agricultural for crop and food supply could not possible for increasing popullation. Additionally, if every person has his own home than surrounding land could be barren due to house waste such as use of detergents and dishwashers.

Although it has few disadvantages of high buildings because it can bring way from natural world, I agree as it has more advantages to fulfill the rising society food demand.

In conclusion, despite tall buildings have no space for greenery and bring us way from envirnment but it is more beneficial for agricultural land and this thing can also support a country by import extra supply.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear: you agree that tall apartment buildings are the best way to provide homes, and you acknowledge drawbacks such as earthquake risk and limited space for gardening. You also give reasons related to population growth and preserving land for agriculture. However, the support is uneven and some points are unclear or not fully connected to the question. For example, the claim that household waste could make surrounding land barren is asserted without explaining how this supports building apartments, and the final reference to importing extra supplies is difficult to follow. Develop fewer reasons more fully, using a specific example and explaining how each one shows that high-rise housing is the best solution.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, contrasting body paragraphs and a conclusion. Phrases such as “On the one hand,” “On the other hand” and “In conclusion” help signal the stages of the argument. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow because several ideas are placed together without clear links. In the second body paragraph, the discussion moves from crowded cities to agricultural land and then to detergents and dishwashers, without showing how these points connect. The conclusion also repeats earlier claims rather than drawing them together clearly. Organise each paragraph around one main reason, then use explanation and an example to develop it; make references such as “this thing” more precise.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to housing and urban growth, including “natural disaster,” “congested,” “extracurricular activities” and “agricultural land.” This gives you some topic-specific range, but inaccurate word choice, collocation and spelling are noticeable and sometimes make the meaning hard to interpret. For example, “apartment sectors” is not a natural term for apartment buildings, while “greater rushy areas” and “bring us way from natural world” are unclear. There are also spelling errors such as “earthquack,” “popullation” and “envirnment.” Aim for accurate, natural combinations rather than more complicated wording, and check spelling carefully. The vocabulary suggestions below offer clearer alternatives for several phrases.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use both simple sentences and attempts at complex structures, including clauses beginning with “Although,” “when” and “if.” However, the range is limited in practice because many longer sentences contain frequent errors in agreement, articles, plurals and verb forms, which can make the argument difficult to follow. Examples include “population are increasing,” “there are no separate space,” and “apartments are build here for provide services.” The sentence beginning “if every individual wants his separate home” also has an unclear construction, and the final sentence is difficult to parse. Practise building accurate sentences with one main clause and a clearly formed supporting clause, checking subject–verb agreement and singular/plural forms before adding further ideas.

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