Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

One of the best ways to facilitate people with accommodation is to have tall apartment blocks. I completely agree with this approach because it decreases the unnecessary use of land and increases the availability of affordable homes for students and visitors.

Land is required to build homes so that people can live their lives with their families. Moreover, we also need land for agricultural purposes. If people start building their individual homes on one piece of land, this will ultimately reduce the availability of land for agricultural purposes. Instead of this approach, multiple apartments can be built on one piece of land in big cities. For example, in most of the countries, such as Pakistan, people build large homes for their living that cover several acres of land because of this limited land is now available for agricultural purposes.

Building apartments will increase the number of houses, which is beneficial for students and visitors when they move to another city or country for study or recreational purposes. For example, in advanced countries, such as Germany, Austria, and France, large or even small cities have apartments. Students who come to these countries to complete their Master or PhD can easily book an affordable apartment because they use land smartly by building multiple apartments in one building. In addition, visitors who find hotels expensive can also move to an apartment, as the cost of one apartment starts from almost 200 euros.

To sum up, building tall apartment blocks is a smart approach to avoid unnecessary use of land and boosts the availability of homes at low cost. We should always prefer this approach rather than building individual mansions.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

Your position is clear from the introduction and conclusion: you strongly support tall apartment blocks, and you give two relevant reasons—using land more efficiently and increasing housing options for students and visitors. The examples about Pakistan and European countries help illustrate these points. This meets the task well, but the support is uneven: the agricultural-land argument is asserted rather than demonstrated, and the claim that apartments provide affordable homes is supported mainly by a specific hotel comparison and an unexplained price of 200 euros. To strengthen the response, explain more directly how high-rise construction can increase the supply of homes and address affordability, while acknowledging a limitation or alternative such as transport or infrastructure needs.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The essay has a clear four-paragraph structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting separate reasons, and a concise conclusion. Progression is easy to follow, and linking expressions such as “Moreover,” “Instead of this approach,” and “In addition” help signal relationships between ideas. The examples are generally placed alongside the points they support. Some connections could be more precise, however: the shift from land for housing to agricultural land is not fully explained, and the final example about apartment prices does not clearly establish that they are affordable. Aim to make each example explicitly prove the preceding claim, and vary or reduce formulaic transitions where the relationship is already clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of topic-related vocabulary, including “agricultural purposes,” “availability,” “recreational purposes,” and “individual mansions.” These choices make your main ideas clear, and you attempt some more formal phrasing. However, several expressions are imprecise or unnatural, such as “facilitate people with accommodation,” “for their living,” and “use land smartly.” Repetition of “apartments,” “land,” and “build” also limits flexibility. Choose more natural collocations and precise terms—for example, describe housing as being provided or made available, and refer to efficient land use. This would make the argument sound more fluent and controlled without requiring unnecessarily complex vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including conditional structures (“If people start building…”) and subordinate clauses explaining purpose and consequence. Most sentences communicate the intended meaning, and punctuation generally supports readability. Some grammatical errors remain, particularly with articles, number, and sentence construction. For example, “complete their Master or PhD” needs a more accurate plural or possessive form, while “because of this limited land is now available” incorrectly joins the cause and result. “One of the best ways to facilitate people with accommodation” also has an awkward grammatical pattern. Review clause boundaries and article use, and check that each sentence has a clear, correctly connected main clause.

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