Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-07-30

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 7.0)

Some people consider building tall apartment blocks is the best solution to over-demographic problem in megacities. However, I would argue that this measure has various disadvantages against citizen’s well-being and comfortable living atmosphere, although it can save the city’s land and protect the land from contamination.

A primary issue on tall buildings is that tall buildings will depress citizens daily when they walk around, as buildings block the sunlight and cements make the city like a concrete forest. For example, when people get up and go downstairs or have a break after work, they will not see any green sights because of high buildings, such as tall apartment blocks, which damage the living environment of the plants. Afterwards, citizens potentially suffer from depressed emotion, so they behave terribly in the workplace and totally influence the function of the society.

Another basic issue we need to consider is the security of tall architectures, accompanying with safety rescue in them. The more height architectures built, the more difficulties architects need to solve and maybe cannot accomplish in some aspects nowadays. For example, fire hazard may happen on the top of the buildings and firemen cannot carry out rescue operations if too many buildings have not equipped with advanced instruments to extinguish, not mention that the possibility of a fire in residential buildings is even greater. So, building tall apartment blocks should be considered carefully before being built.

On the other hand, this measure do have some advantages and the main advantage is saving land and protecting environment. With the huge increase in the population of big cities, the government only can broaden the city area without increase in height, and only then can it withstand the demographic pressure. Under this assumption, broadening areas means that many lands are occupied, which are potentially used for farmers to grow crops and are vital to sustainability of the environment.

In conclusion, building tall apartment blocks may hurt citizens’ health and security and affecting the operation of society, although it can benefit in some cases.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

这篇回答通过明确反对单一使用高层公寓楼来回应题目。观点具有相关性，重点关注了心理健康和安全问题。然而，论证发展有些不均衡。关于 'depressed emotion' 的论点有些推测性，缺乏深度；而关于土地保护的反方观点虽然引入得当，但本可以更充分地融入整体立场中。结论部分略显简短，仅仅是重申了观点，而没有进行综合概括。总的来说，这篇回答充分涵盖了任务的所有部分，达到了 Band 6.5 的要求，但由于部分论点深度有限，更倾向于 Band 6 的水平。

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

文章逻辑组织严密，段落清晰，每段都有中心主题。使用了 'A primary issue'、'Another basic issue' 和 'On the other hand' 等衔接词，帮助引导读者理解论点。然而，一些过渡句显得有些机械或生硬，例如 'Afterwards, citizens potentially suffer...' 和 'not mention that the possibility...'。指代关系总体清晰，但段落内句子之间的衔接如果能更顺畅，将有助于获得更高的分数。段落划分恰当，对文章的整体连贯性有所贡献。

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

词汇足以完成任务，使作者能够清晰地表达观点。尝试使用了 'over-demographic problem'、'sustainability' 和 'fire hazard' 等主题相关词汇。然而，在选词和搭配上存在一些不准确之处，例如 'cements make the city like a concrete forest'（应为 'concrete makes'）和 'the more height architectures built'（应为 'the taller the buildings'）。虽然这些错误不影响交流，但表明需要对词形和搭配进行更精确的控制，才能达到更高的分数段。

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

学生混合使用了简单句和复杂句。文中存在一些语法错误，如主谓一致问题（'this measure do have'）和生硬的表达（'not mention that the possibility...'）。标点符号使用基本正确，但在句子结构上存在一些小错误。虽然这些错误很明显，但很少影响读者对主要观点的理解。为了提高，学生应专注于打磨复杂句式，并确保主谓一致和介词使用的准确性。

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