Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-07-31

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

In recent years, there has been an upward trend towards people shifting from a house in suburb to an apartment in city hence the most efficient use of land is to construct tall apartments instead of house. In my opinion I partially disagree to the statement. In this essay I will support my opinion with logical reasons.

To begin with, the capacity of apartment is far greater than the single house built on same portion of land. A house can gove shelter to only small number of people whereas in partment a considerable number of family can live together which is the first advantage of building apartment. Furthermore, an apratment is cost effective in compared to a house becuase it is considered as shared property among the individuals living in the same building. The aparments offers good privacy and a quite environment because the residents are often students or the professsional doing job and minding their own business.

On the other hand, there are numerous alternates of an apartment such as underground settlement. The fucntion of underground settlement is the same as tall apartment but with inbuilt feature of maintaining a low temperature with the help of surrounded soil also in the state of national emergency such as war this underground facilities can be used as bunker hence the construction of expensive bunkers can be eliminated. Moreover, another alternate of apartment is house. A well planned design of house come with few advantages such as an extra space at the top of the house which can be utilize for small parties and family get to gathering. The house provides a friendly and lively environment for the children.

In conclusion, Although construction apartments provide effiecent use of land in the congested area, other alternatives of apartment such as well planned house and underground settlement with inbuilt extra features also should be considered, therfore I partially disagree to the statement.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The essay addresses the prompt by discussing the merits of tall apartment blocks and proposing alternatives. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. While you mention 'underground settlements' as an alternative, this is not a realistic or common solution for housing in large cities, which weakens the logical development of your argument. The position is clear, but the supporting arguments for the alternatives lack depth and practical relevance. To improve, focus on more conventional urban planning solutions and provide more detailed explanations for why those alternatives might be superior or complementary to tall apartment blocks.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organized into clear paragraphs, and there is a logical progression of ideas. You use some cohesive devices such as 'To begin with,' 'Furthermore,' and 'On the other hand' to link your points. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical, and there are instances where the flow between sentences could be smoother. Referencing is generally clear, but the transition between the discussion of apartments and the introduction of 'underground settlements' feels abrupt and lacks a strong logical bridge. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring smoother transitions would enhance the overall coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary used is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to express your ideas clearly. You attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary like 'congested area' and 'shared property.' However, there are several spelling errors (e.g., 'gove', 'partment', 'apratment', 'fucntion', 'effiecent') and some awkward word choices, such as 'underground settlement' and 'minding their own business,' which is slightly informal for an academic essay. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise academic collocations and ensure accuracy in spelling.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with articles ('a house', 'in city'), pluralization ('apartment', 'house'), and verb forms ('can be utilize'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some missing commas that would help clarify your sentences. The errors do not significantly impede communication, but they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles will help improve your accuracy.

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