Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In the question it is written or defines that the great way to give the facilities of home in huge cities is to build a tall apartment with the help of blocks.

There are several people who suffers from poverty and can not even their basic needs . by building the apartments numerous people can have their homes . The particular apartment should be capable enough to have enough space for the larger families .Moreover, as we know the employment crises .thousands of people have all type of degrees and qualification but still no job at all but because of the build of apartment blocks employment opportunities can be increased .

the apartment should have two facilities like rented or owned because many cant afford to buy a flat . In case apartment takes lesser space in compare of a big house . However, the current generation are more into flats in compare of houses so the chances of apartments being occupied is high . As we have seen a significant rise in the prices of the houses but the apartment prices are relatively lesser than the houses. Moreover, the apartments should be well enough maintained because of hygiene and cleanliness.

To conclude I partially believes that by building tall apartment blocks for the people is a great way . further more everyone has their choice like what they prefer in living house or just a tall apartment blocks because several people lived all their life in their homes .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt but lacks a clear, consistent position. While you mention that building tall apartments is a 'great way' to provide homes, the development of your ideas is limited. For instance, the argument regarding employment is not clearly linked to the construction of apartment blocks, making the connection tenuous. The ideas are somewhat repetitive, and the conclusion introduces a 'partial' stance that contradicts the earlier positive tone. To improve, ensure each paragraph focuses on a single, well-supported argument that directly answers the 'to what extent' aspect of the prompt. Provide specific examples or logical chains of reasoning to strengthen your position.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression between ideas is often weak. You use some cohesive devices like 'Moreover' and 'However', but they are sometimes used incorrectly or do not effectively link the sentences. For example, the transition between discussing poverty and employment is abrupt. Additionally, the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the sentence 'In case apartment takes lesser space in compare of a big house'. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each sentence flows naturally from the previous one. Clearer topic sentences would also help the reader follow your argument more easily.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is generally basic and repetitive. You rely on simple phrases like 'great way', 'big house', and 'have their homes'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'employment crises' (instead of 'unemployment') and 'build of apartment blocks' (instead of 'construction'). While the meaning is generally clear, the range of vocabulary is limited and does not demonstrate the flexibility required for higher bands. To improve, try to incorporate more precise academic vocabulary related to urban planning and housing, and pay closer attention to word forms and collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the essay that occasionally impede communication. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('everyone has their choice', 'people suffers'), incorrect preposition usage ('in compare of'), and awkward sentence structures ('In the question it is written or defines that...'). You rely mostly on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences often contain errors. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, particularly subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles and prepositions. Proofreading your work for these common errors will significantly improve the clarity and accuracy of your writing.

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