Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

BP1 = jobs - less land occupy

BP2 = Sharing cost - Near Schools, workplaces

Nowadays, individuals are migrating from remote areas to urban areas, subsequently, facing problem of land shortage. So, some individuals convey conspicuous view point that providing accomodation for them as appartments in the cities a appropriate way in the form of tall appartment blocks.

First and foremost, both the purposes jobs and education people stay in appartment or hostels. They prefer location to live which is nearby the workplace or schools or colleges. Accordingly, it is a best approach to construct buildings as a multi-story buildings. This will not only save time but also traffic congestion would be reduced. For example - because of the time shortage everyone give first priority private vehicles than public transport. Furthermore, this will also reduce the rate of deforestation. As to live they need space if appartments would be available people prefer those buildings than own homes. Although own homes give privacy & freedom comparatively rented areas but it seeks money and to buy land and construction. As a result it Is beneficial for both human beings and nature.

Furthermore, no doubt these buildings provide multiple benefits for humans. Firstly, electrical bills, rents, maintainence cost have been sharing among them residents. It is balance approach for for financial managment. Secondly, it keeps away from isolation individuals can engage with people under one roof having fun, share memories, create own memories, learn social skills. It is proven by researchers that loneliness leads to multifarious health problems such as dimentia, suicidal thoughts, depression. So, it contributes essential component health related issues to overcome

In conclusion, rented houses multi-story accomodation for employee and students most suitable decission to overcome trees cutting, finance mangyment, and isolation.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses the prompt by discussing the benefits of tall apartment blocks, such as land efficiency, cost-sharing, and social interaction. However, the position is not fully developed. While you mention that tall buildings save land and reduce deforestation, the argument lacks depth regarding potential drawbacks or a more nuanced exploration of the 'best way' aspect of the prompt. The ideas are relevant but remain somewhat superficial. To reach a higher band, ensure that each point is supported by more detailed reasoning or specific, illustrative examples rather than just listing benefits.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, and there is a logical progression of ideas. You use some cohesive devices like 'First and foremost', 'Furthermore', and 'In conclusion' to signal the structure. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly awkward, such as the transition into the second body paragraph. Additionally, some sentences are disjointed, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, which affects the flow. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each sentence connects smoothly to the next would enhance the overall coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to convey your ideas clearly. You use some topic-specific terms like 'deforestation', 'traffic congestion', and 'multifarious'. However, there are several spelling errors ('appartments', 'maintainence', 'dimentia', 'mangyment') and some word choice issues ('balance approach', 'convey conspicuous view point'). The range is sufficient to communicate, but the lack of precision and the recurring spelling mistakes prevent a higher score. Focusing on accurate spelling and more natural collocations will help improve this score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with articles, subject-verb agreement, and sentence fragments (e.g., 'It is balance approach for for financial managment'). Some sentences are poorly constructed, such as 'So, it contributes essential component health related issues to overcome'. These errors are noticeable and occasionally require the reader to re-read to understand the intended meaning. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, punctuation, and ensuring that your complex sentences are grammatically sound.

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