Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In this graph we are going to describe that which homes are good in the cities areas or buildings blocks are better in the cities...

First of all in the large cities we can build the tall apartments in the blocks. In big cities we can make the large apartment and it can helps us to keep our families in these apartment. But in the larges cities peoples makes many apartments after that make give it to the other people on the rant and helps the people with the suitable prices and manageable places and rooms. In large cities we can get a apartment on the first or second and on any floor. People can get more benefiters through these apartments like its really suitable beneficial for those people which are doing there jobs. In these apartment we can get more fresh air and specific place. So we can help each other through the many essential things.

On the other hand if we provide the tall apartment in the large area then it can affect the people lives. In the tall apartment blocks have the large quantity of people in these blocks. In the blocks people can affects each other through the noise and more traffic in the large cities. In the larges cities people can effects through the apartment noise. In these areas people lived in the same place and using same place for outgoing and doing many kinds of works in these areas. But at the same time people can irritate with each other and lose privacy.

At the point of view in my point of view building the large and tall apartment blocks are not good for humans living life styles and more traffic make the people more irritate. If we make the large apartments far from the cities then we can live in the peace and traffic could not effects the people lives and habite

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing the pros and cons of tall apartment blocks, but the development is limited. The introduction is off-topic, as it refers to a 'graph' which does not exist, suggesting a misunderstanding of the task type. While you present a position, the arguments are repetitive and lack specific examples or depth. For instance, you mention 'noise' and 'traffic' multiple times without explaining how these issues could be mitigated or why they are the primary concerns. To improve, ensure you clearly state your position in the introduction and provide well-developed, distinct arguments in each body paragraph that directly support your stance.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is weak. The transition between ideas is often repetitive, such as the repeated use of 'In large cities' and 'In these areas' to start sentences. Cohesive devices are basic and sometimes misused, making the progression of ideas feel mechanical. For example, the phrase 'After that make give it to the other people' is unclear and disrupts the flow of the argument. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'nonetheless') and ensure that each sentence logically follows the previous one to create a more cohesive argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, which restricts the ability to convey complex ideas. You frequently use basic terms like 'good', 'big', 'make', and 'people'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'benefiters' instead of 'benefits', and 'rant' instead of 'rent'. The phrasing 'doing there jobs' and 'humans living life styles' is unnatural. To reach a higher band, you should focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to urban planning and housing, and practice using synonyms to avoid repeating the same words throughout the essay.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'peoples makes', 'it can helps'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, such as 'In the tall apartment blocks have the large quantity of people'. The use of complex structures is attempted but often results in errors, such as 'If we make the large apartments far from the cities then we can live in the peace'. Focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and correct verb tenses, before attempting more complex grammatical structures.

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