Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-07
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
House very important or the main part of our life. And the amazing way to gives large amount homes in big cities is to build tall apartment blocks. In my opinion, I'm agree this statement, because it's good for local peoples. And they can buy or live in big cities with the help of this opportunity. This essay gives the information about tall apartment blocks.
Firstly, most people think that the best decision is that to live in big city. Because the large city gives large amount of opportunities and benefits. In big cities, there are many hospitals, education buildings and some adventures places. Most people's dreams to live in the big cities. Therefore, the people build tall apartment blocks. In this blocks, there are enough homes present and can easily provide peoples.
For example, the large city in Pakistan is Lahore. And it is very popular, beautiful and historical city. And in this city, people make apartment blocks and sale this apartment to the other peoples. And mostly people live there and enjoy their life with great opportunities.
Secondly, it's disadvantage for the villages. Because mostly people sale their land and their old house and go city. And this way creates a impact on farming. For example farmers sale their land and go city. And don't work as a farmer. So, the economy of country low day by day that's not good.
In conclusion, this way is good only whose people that live in city in past. For example, the people that live in old town their house land is small and this people can change his house and shift in the big apartment. Therefore, it's good for city's people only if village's people do this, it creates a impact on country's economy.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by discussing the benefits and drawbacks of tall apartment blocks. However, the position is not consistently maintained; the essay starts by agreeing with the statement but then introduces significant disadvantages regarding rural migration and the economy, which weakens the overall argument. The ideas are present but remain somewhat under-developed, particularly the link between apartment blocks and the decline of farming. To improve, you should ensure your position is clear throughout and provide more detailed explanations for your claims rather than listing points.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as the repetitive use of 'And' at the start of sentences and the awkward transition 'In this blocks'. The logical progression between ideas is sometimes disjointed, particularly in the transition between the benefits of city living and the negative impact on rural areas. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that pronouns clearly refer to previous nouns would significantly enhance the flow of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive, relying on basic terms like 'good', 'big', and 'people'. There are several instances of incorrect word choice or collocation, such as 'adventures places' instead of 'recreational facilities' and 'sale this apartment' instead of 'sell these apartments'. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of range and the frequent errors in word form and usage prevent the essay from reaching a higher band. You should focus on learning synonyms for common words and practicing the correct usage of verbs and nouns in context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('the economy of country low', 'this way creates a impact'), article misuse, and incorrect pluralisation ('peoples', 'this blocks'). While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to cause difficulty for the reader. To improve, you should work on mastering basic sentence construction, including the correct use of articles, plurals, and verb tenses, before attempting more complex structures.
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