Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-09
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Beyond doubt there has been much discussion revolving around the issue of whether suggestion to built an apartment blocks in metropoliton cities is beneficial or not. Some thinkers favour this argument whereas other intellectual oppose this phenomena . As far as my opinion is concerned , i am fully agree with this statement that it is best option to construct the apartments in the big cities.
There are myriads of reasons to support that the maximum residence for individuals in big buildings, the first and foremost reason is that its safest way for the common masses to share the building from the different regions as they are shifted due to their jobs and higher studies, Moreover urban areas become more spacious for parks and schools. It is well documented that most of the youngsters are preferred to reside in apartments due to the low cost of maintainences and big parkings.
Despite several advantages of living in higher buildings in urban areas the disadvantages cannot be put on back burner , residents can get detatched from the other residents. Furthermore,
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 179 words. This significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you state a clear position in the introduction, the arguments provided are underdeveloped. For instance, you mention 'low cost of maintenance' and 'big parkings' as reasons for preferring apartments, but these points are not expanded upon with sufficient detail or logical explanation. Furthermore, the essay is incomplete, ending abruptly after the first sentence of the second body paragraph. To improve, you must ensure all parts of the prompt are addressed with fully extended arguments and reach the required length.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay shows some attempt at logical organization, using basic linking words like 'Moreover' and 'Despite'. However, the progression of ideas is hindered by the incomplete nature of the text. Paragraphing is present, but the second paragraph is cut off, which disrupts the overall flow. Cohesive devices are used in a somewhat mechanical way, and the lack of a conclusion means the essay lacks a sense of closure. To improve, focus on developing each paragraph fully and ensuring that transitions between sentences are smooth and varied.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary range is limited and contains several errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'metropoliton', 'built' instead of 'building', and 'maintainences'. You use some relevant topic-specific vocabulary like 'residence' and 'urban areas', but the overall control is inconsistent. There is a reliance on simple phrasing, and some collocations are awkward, such as 'share the building from the different regions'. To reach a higher band, you should work on using more precise academic vocabulary and ensure correct spelling and word forms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'i am fully agree' (should be 'I fully agree'), 'suggestion to built' (should be 'suggestion to build'), and 'youngsters are preferred' (should be 'youngsters prefer'). The sentence structures are mostly simple or contain errors when attempting complexity. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before commas. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, correct verb forms, and mastering basic sentence construction before attempting more complex structures.
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