Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In today world polulation is increasing in urban areas.As a result peoples face problems to finding their accomodation.Some people believe that building large appartments block is the solution to this problem.I partially agree with this statement because,tall apartments provide the effective for living but they also not good for every situation.

Firstly, high rise buildings provide jome for living.A large number of people can livie in small area,which makes it easier to purchase homes easily.For example instead of buildings hundreds of separate house over the large land area.Morever appartments constructed is near to workplace and schools ,it can be reduce the traveling time.

On the other hand in large appartment block large amount of people live.It can cause overcrowded and put on pressue on roads,transport and hospital.Furthermore it also disturbence also no private area available for playing.Family with young childern are prefer to house with garden where they can play

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 150 words. This significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you present a clear position and address both sides of the argument, the points are underdeveloped. For instance, the argument regarding infrastructure pressure is mentioned but not expanded upon with specific examples or logical depth. To improve, you must elaborate on your points with detailed explanations and relevant examples to meet the length requirement and provide a more comprehensive discussion of the topic.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive start. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and limited. Transitions like 'Firstly' and 'On the other hand' are used, but the flow between sentences is often disjointed due to grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. The progression of ideas is present but lacks sophistication. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that your sentences connect logically to one another to create a smoother, more cohesive argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, which limits your ability to express complex ideas. There are several spelling errors, such as 'polulation', 'appartments', 'jome', and 'livie'. Additionally, word choice is often imprecise, such as 'provide the effective for living' or 'disturbence'. To reach a higher band, you need to expand your range of vocabulary to include more academic and topic-specific terms and focus on accurate spelling and correct collocations. Avoid repeating the same words and try to use synonyms to enhance your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. Examples include 'In today world', 'peoples face problems to finding', and 'Family with young childern are prefer to house'. The sentence structures are mostly simple, and there is a lack of complex grammatical forms. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after periods. To improve, you should focus on subject-verb agreement, correct preposition usage, and sentence variety. Practicing the construction of complex sentences will help you demonstrate a better range of grammatical control.

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