Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-09
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In today world polulation is increasing in urban areas.As a result peoples face problems to finding their accomodation.Some people believe that building large appartments block is the solution to this problem.I partially agree with this statement because,tall apartments provide the effective for living but they also not good for every situation.
Firstly, high rise buildings provide jome for living.A large number of people can livie in small area,which makes it easier to purchase homes easily.For example instead of buildings hundreds of separate house over the large land area.Morever appartments constructed is near to workplace and schools ,it can be reduce the traveling time.
On the other hand in large appartment block large amount of people live.It can cause overcrowded and put on pressue on roads,transport and hospital.Furthermore it also disturbence due closes of housesno private area available for playing.Family with young childern are prefer to house with garden where their childern can doing outdoor activities.
In conclution high rise buildings are the effection way for living in urben cities,where the limited land,but this is not complete solution .with high rise buildings other type of housig would be better approach
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 189 words. This significantly impacts the development of ideas, as the arguments remain superficial and lack sufficient supporting evidence or examples. While you have addressed the prompt by providing a clear position, the under-length nature of the essay prevents a full development of the points raised. To improve, you must expand on your arguments by providing more detailed explanations and specific, real-world examples to meet the length requirement and demonstrate a deeper engagement with the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some basic cohesive devices such as 'Firstly', 'On the other hand', and 'In conclusion'. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the logical progression is hindered by the lack of depth in the arguments. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the transition between ideas could be smoother. To improve, focus on using a wider range of cohesive devices and ensuring that each paragraph develops a single, clear idea with logical supporting sentences.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but remains quite basic and repetitive. There are several spelling errors, such as 'polulation', 'accomodation', 'appartments', 'jome', 'livie', 'urben', and 'housig'. These errors occasionally distract the reader. You rely on simple, high-frequency words and struggle to use more precise or academic vocabulary. To reach a higher band, you should work on expanding your range of vocabulary, focusing on collocations and academic terms related to urban planning, and paying closer attention to spelling accuracy.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('peoples face', 'Family with young childern are prefer'), article usage, and sentence structure ('tall apartments provide the effective for living'). There is a limited range of complex structures, and the existing attempts often contain errors that impede clarity. While the meaning is generally understandable, the persistent errors in basic grammar and punctuation are noticeable. You should focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like pluralization and verb forms.
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