Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-09
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The best way to provide enough homes in the big cities is to build tall apartment blocks . This essay will illustrate full agreement with this statement.
to commence with , individuals are not all rich in large cities , they can not afford a home in big cities because of person homes are more expensive as compared to small cities , then apartment blocks are build in large cities , it is benefit of small busine man and other low income people . moreover , it is also benefit for immigrated people who moves in another countrey , for instance, most of people is immigrated in canada, us and other country , peoples went to lives in big cities of that country for gets butter opportunities , people are struggled for sattlement in cities , they are a minimum rent of home.
furthermore , old people and other people who can not take care of personal home then best way to they are lived in apartment , other reason is security, people are lived in apartment , those is inter in apartment gate , other are not allowed .as well as apartment is build in near to market , hospital and parks , then people are easy to approached
conclusion, we can say that the best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks , it is benefited for low income people , immigrated people and old people who can not take care of home .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The essay addresses the prompt by expressing a clear position in favor of tall apartment blocks. However, the development of ideas is limited. While you mention affordability, security, and proximity to amenities, these points are presented as a list of assertions rather than fully developed arguments. The explanation for why tall buildings are the 'best' way is somewhat superficial, and the supporting examples (e.g., immigrants in Canada) are vague and lack depth. To improve, you should focus on explaining the 'why' and 'how' behind your arguments, providing more specific reasoning to support your stance.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is frequently interrupted by awkward phrasing and a lack of effective cohesive devices. Transitions like 'to commence with' and 'furthermore' are used, but the internal structure of sentences is often disjointed, making it difficult to follow the progression of ideas. Referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the phrase 'those is inter in apartment gate', which obscures the meaning. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that each sentence clearly connects to the previous one to create a smoother, more logical argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, relying on basic terms like 'big cities', 'homes', and 'people'. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'person homes' instead of 'private residences' and 'sattlement' instead of 'settlement'. Some phrases are non-standard, such as 'gets butter opportunities', which hinders clarity. To reach a higher band, you need to expand your vocabulary to include more precise, academic terminology related to urban planning and housing, and pay closer attention to correct word forms and collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'apartment blocks are build'), incorrect verb tenses, and missing articles. Sentence structures are mostly simple or contain errors when attempting more complex constructions, such as 'people are lived in apartment'. Punctuation is also problematic, with spaces before commas and inconsistent capitalization. To improve, you must focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of passive voice, before attempting more complex grammatical structures.
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