Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

This a very crusial topic to discuss due to this developing world and boosted rate in population growth, where (1. limited amount of land is available for living. 2. Higher population increased due to better lifestyle and good healthcare. 3. Scarcity of resources dur to heavy usage in developing their lands). I agree that tall buildings are enough to keep people and feels like home.

As per my prespective due to higher rate of population growth everyone needs a place to call it as their home. But due to scarcity of the land tall buildings will be useful to keep a larger amount of people to live in a small piece of land. If broad and larger homes are provided to the people then there will be no land left for agriculture, factory development and other neccesities. But this tall builids help to live in a stack with no noted wastage of land and keeping people happle with their oen homes.

For explaining this topic I have a best and easily understandable example which includes talle skyscapres in western countires like Ontario, New York, Etc. This skyscrapes have up to 25-30 floors and each floor contains about 4-6 apartments. For an instanct if each apartment could contain up to 4-5 members of family it roughly contain [redacted phone] families which can contain up to [redacted phone] people living inside of one 25-30 building.

From this example I could state that this tall buildings are useful to keep large number of people in a small amount of land by living one up one another in a stack of storage. Which helps in preserving land and to provide a so called home to the families.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position in favor of tall apartment blocks. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you mention land scarcity and the need for housing, the arguments are repetitive and lack depth. For instance, the discussion on agriculture and factory development is a good point, but it is not fully explored. The example provided is relevant, but the calculation of residents is slightly distracting and does not add significant weight to the argument. To improve, focus on expanding your reasoning with more nuanced points, such as the social or environmental impacts of high-density living, rather than just repeating the idea of 'stacking' people.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, the opening paragraph uses a numbered list format, which is inappropriate for an academic essay. Transitions between sentences are sometimes abrupt, such as 'For explaining this topic I have a best and easily understandable example'. Improving the flow between ideas by using a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'furthermore', 'in contrast') would help the essay read more naturally and improve the logical progression of your arguments.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks precision and sophistication. There are several spelling errors, such as 'crusial', 'prespective', 'neccesities', 'builids', 'happle', 'oen', 'talle', 'skyscapres', and 'instanct'. These errors are frequent and occasionally distract the reader. Furthermore, the word choice is often simplistic, such as 'keep people' or 'stack of storage'. To reach a higher band, you should work on using more precise academic vocabulary and ensure that you proofread your work to eliminate basic spelling mistakes that impede the professional tone of the writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures. While there are attempts at complex sentences, they are often marred by grammatical errors, such as 'This a very crusial topic' (missing verb) and 'everyone needs a place to call it as their home' (incorrect prepositional usage). There are also issues with subject-verb agreement and article usage, such as 'this tall buildings' instead of 'these tall buildings'. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and reducing the frequency of errors. Incorporating a wider range of complex structures, such as conditional sentences or relative clauses, will help demonstrate better grammatical control.

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