Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In this modern-era a huge development is observe in human population. Owing to this crowd is increase in cites and notice people dealing with space to live to overcome this problem construction of an tall apartment is took place. i agree with this notion and supporting point will be given in subsequent paragraphs.

The most prominent reason to build an tall apartment is overpopulation. To explicate, intense ,rapid growth of individual leads the shortage of space to live and due to this one best way to full fill the need of living space is build a tall buildings .Apart from this, another considerable reason is urbanization. To elaborate it , in current days increase the city development ratio and more and more people are willingly migrate from rural area to cities to gain employment, education, experience, more opportunities and for better living style. This increase the crowd in urban area and people suffering from shortage of homes and overcome this problem by staying in flats or building and full fill need of home.

Paradoxically, instead of building an apartment in city we have to promote the ruralization and provide the all needs at rural area such as well education, employment , hospital etcetera so people live in their and maintain crowd in cites. People needy things available as their village so people do not need tot migrate in cites.

To conclude, building an tall apartment is best way to provide homes in cites to every family because of lack to area in city side. However, by promoting a ruralization we can solve the problem of tall apartments.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses the prompt by expressing a clear position, but the development of ideas is inconsistent. While you identify overpopulation and urbanization as reasons for tall buildings, the explanation is repetitive and lacks depth. The third paragraph introduces a counter-argument regarding rural development, but it is somewhat disconnected from the main argument. To improve, ensure each paragraph focuses on a single, well-developed point with specific examples or logical consequences. The conclusion is brief and slightly contradictory, as it suggests tall buildings are the 'best way' while simultaneously proposing an alternative solution, which weakens your overall stance.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is frequently interrupted by awkward phrasing and mechanical transitions. You use some cohesive devices like 'To explicate' and 'To conclude', but they are often used incorrectly or in a way that feels forced. Referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the phrase 'people live in their', where the pronoun does not clearly refer back to a specific noun. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each sentence flows naturally into the next will significantly enhance the readability of your work.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. You frequently use basic terms like 'crowd', 'problem', and 'things', which restricts your ability to express complex ideas precisely. There are also issues with word formation and collocation, such as 'modern-era' (should be 'modern era'), 'full fill' (should be 'fulfill'), and 'ruralization' (which is not standard English). To reach a higher band, focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to urban planning and housing, and practice using synonyms to avoid repeating the same words throughout the essay.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement ('a huge development is observe'), article usage ('an tall apartment'), and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, making them difficult to follow. You rely heavily on simple sentence structures and struggle when attempting more complex ones. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb-object patterns, and pay close attention to the correct use of articles and pluralization.

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