Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The best way to provide large number of homes to people in large cities . To provide enough home the architecture was design to best ways .The shape of home are design to unique . In internal building the parking are build to parked the vehicles . The small homes are build to 3to4 floor of building so, the large number are in home for living of people . The internal of building are build to full of concrete and iron so, that that the lesser number of chances of earthquke . The tall building have benefits as well as both loses . The loses was that the number of earthquike are increase . The lives of peoples are in danger and children are also include in this list The building are build to see the weather of particular area very well so the precious lives of people safe . The government are also strictness on broker or developer . The less chances of danger . In tall buildings to reach the people on 1 to top floor the ellivater was build so the people are easily reach to top floor . To provide power to people the solar panel are also install . In tall building the biggest problem is that ,there is too hotness in building .The tall building are design to so, that there is no hotness in and no coldness . The other technique are applied tall in tall building so, the people are easily live tall buidings.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the prompt regarding tall apartment blocks, but the position is unclear and poorly developed. While the writer mentions both benefits and drawbacks, the ideas are presented in a fragmented manner without logical expansion or relevant examples. The response lacks a clear introduction and conclusion, and the arguments regarding earthquake safety and climate control are superficial and lack depth. The response fails to provide a coherent argument, resulting in a limited response that does not fully address the complexity of the task.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks logical organization. There is no paragraphing, which makes the text difficult to follow. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, such as the repetitive use of 'The' to start sentences and the misuse of 'so' as a connector. The progression of ideas is disjointed, jumping between topics like parking, earthquakes, and elevators without clear transitions. The lack of structure significantly hinders the reader's ability to follow the writer's train of thought.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and often inaccurate. There is significant misuse of word forms, such as 'hotness' instead of 'heat' or 'temperature,' and 'ellivater' (spelling error). The writer relies on basic, repetitive vocabulary, and there is a lack of control over word choice, which frequently impedes communication. The use of 'loses' for 'disadvantages' and 'strictness' as a verb are examples of lexical errors that demonstrate a lack of range and precision required for higher bands.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammar is characterized by frequent, systematic errors that often distort meaning. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The shape of home are design'), tense usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack proper syntax, such as 'The best way to provide large number of homes to people in large cities .' The lack of control over basic grammatical structures, including pluralization and article usage, makes the text difficult to read and understand.

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