Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-11
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The ara just humans can be used different way to writing eassy and the great method to from enough house in big cities is to constraction large room blocks i completely agree with these statements
To commence with the are main reasion on agree topic because they are more benifit in daily life an can halp from diferent porpose to people to see the good way to see all these lower building and city views ampressive so relax for stress and enjoy these time with joyful other disadvantages of the place can wrong way use because in they fature killer can used to kill any person shote they high block very easy to istance the last few years ago imran khan in lide one speach on party and shorted the gun and will three bould in foot there are same used way to distory they way on it
On the other hand people are like a apartment after marriage can sparate on family and enjoy life time spend your wife and apartment will be better on the new marriage life beacause they are many reasion on of them there praywaise is safe not can see your room and not inter face you can sleep and going to shoping a new life will see beautyful views you wife late night at the tall apartment with out any problem i agree these statement but maney wat that for example life is easy way to marriage sperat apartment and not took any these questions where any why such as apartment life so impressive be i can feel happy and long day well spend hare without problem
In conclusion apartment life nice and spend quality time relax your family and new marraige life so more benifit him al these time
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the prompt by agreeing with the statement, but the development of ideas is severely limited by a lack of clarity. While the student mentions benefits like city views and privacy, the arguments are disjointed and often irrelevant, such as the confusing anecdote about a political figure and gun violence. The position is stated, but the supporting points are not logically extended or clearly explained. The response fails to provide a coherent argument regarding urban planning or housing solutions, making it difficult for the reader to follow the intended line of reasoning. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the internal structure is weak. There is a lack of logical progression between sentences and ideas. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, leading to a fragmented flow. For example, the transition from discussing apartment views to the unrelated anecdote about a shooting is abrupt and confusing. Referencing is often unclear, and the relationship between ideas is not explicitly stated. The overall arrangement of information is difficult to follow, which significantly hinders the reader's ability to grasp the writer's intended message.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very basic and often inaccurate, which frequently impedes communication. There are numerous spelling errors (e.g., 'eassy', 'reasion', 'benifit', 'fature', 'shote', 'praywaise') and incorrect word choices that make sentences difficult to interpret. The student struggles to use appropriate terminology related to urban development or housing. The range of vocabulary is limited to simple, repetitive words, and the misuse of terms like 'killer' and 'shoted' in the context of apartment living demonstrates a lack of control over word choice and collocation.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple, error-prone sentences. There are frequent errors in basic sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, and punctuation. Many sentences are run-on or lack necessary articles and prepositions, such as 'The ara just humans can be used different way to writing eassy'. The lack of control over complex structures is evident, and the persistent errors in grammar often distort the intended meaning of the text. The writing does not demonstrate the ability to produce error-free sentences consistently.
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