Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-13
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In resent time, the main problem is for all human is the high number of population and it increasing. The perfect idea to provide house in urban area is to build big apartment. I strongly agree with that, making a large building is the profetional idea for reduce the peopel house problem.
To commence with, build tall apartment is the profetional way to manage the people, this is because, large building covers samll area as compare to make home individualy for all. In USA, For instance, they build high number of storys building for live individuals peace fully and perfectly. As a result, the struter of USA look professional and beautiful.
Moreover, the trafic is on road incres highly, this is because people make house individualy, so build big building saves area for making extra road. In China, To exemplify, they make big apartment for redus the trafic problem. Therefore, Chinas' people do not suffer from the large traffic and saves their countrys environment perfectly.
In conclusion, although, make building is not easy for enginear, it have many benefits, like reduce the traffic and manage the people in professional way. My stand with here for build large building is fine for individuals.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you clearly state your position in the introduction, the supporting arguments are underdeveloped and repetitive. You mention traffic and land usage, but these points lack depth and specific, well-explained examples. The conclusion is also quite brief. To improve, you must expand your arguments with more detailed explanations and ensure you meet the length requirement to allow for a full exploration of the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inaccurate, such as 'To commence with' and 'To exemplify'. The progression of ideas is often hindered by the limited length and repetitive phrasing. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the transition between sentences feels abrupt. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words more naturally and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that flows logically into the next.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'big', 'make', and 'professional'. There are frequent spelling errors, such as 'resent' for 'recent', 'profetional' for 'professional', 'struter' for 'structure', and 'redus' for 'reduce'. These errors occasionally make it difficult for the reader to follow your meaning. To improve, you should focus on learning more precise academic vocabulary and pay closer attention to spelling. Expanding your range of synonyms will help you avoid repeating the same words throughout the essay.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('it increasing', 'traffic is on road incres highly'), incorrect word forms ('build tall apartment' instead of 'building tall apartments'), and punctuation errors. You rely mostly on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors that impede clarity. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically verb tenses and pluralization, before attempting more complex grammatical structures. Proofreading for basic errors is essential.
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