Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-13
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
In present time with rising number of the urban population, it is widely important to manage enough homes place for residents in large cities. Not only local population contributes for rising number of locality, people coming from other locality and native location globally for work, study places the role too. In order to provide them enough space for living should be plan intellectually. I agree with the point of building tall blocks can provide enough space for large cities. I will discuss my opinions in forthcoming paragraphs.
High rise and tenament accommodation plays respective roles in city growth. tenament requires large are of land which can accommodate only one family, also require more space for parking plot and recreational activity space. However, in high rises it is possible to manage these things wisely with structured architectural planning.
In cities, there are often little space available for residential development. High rise apartment can build in small are with enough number of unites. Which can accommodate to hundred of families. Rest space can be occupied for recreational eminities for families living there. It also reduce the possibility of moving outskirts of the town.
On the other hand, relying more on high rises can with large unit numbers can create problems too. Since the high rises are dense overcrowded it may effect the family privacy. It may create noise pollution, especially during festival seasons. Therefore, government should limit the unity number to prevent such problems to prevent inconvenience faced by families. Developing public transport and food availibity would also be helpful for for citizens.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position in favor of tall apartment blocks. The main ideas—land efficiency and recreational space—are relevant. However, the development is somewhat limited; for instance, the argument about 'recreational amenities' is mentioned but not fully explained. The counter-argument regarding privacy and noise is a good addition, but the conclusion is missing, which is a requirement for a fully developed essay. The response stays on topic throughout, but the depth of analysis remains at a basic level, preventing it from reaching higher bands.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'However', 'In cities', and 'On the other hand', which help the flow of ideas. However, some transitions are mechanical or slightly awkward, such as 'Which can accommodate to hundred of families' starting a new sentence. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the progression of ideas could be smoother. Paragraphing is used appropriately, but the lack of a concluding paragraph impacts the overall structure and sense of completion.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. There are several instances of awkward word choices or incorrect collocations, such as 'manage enough homes place', 'tenament requires large are of land', and 'food availibity'. The student attempts to use topic-specific vocabulary like 'recreational amenities' and 'architectural planning', but spelling errors (e.g., 'eminities', 'availibity', 'unity') and grammatical slips in word forms occur frequently. To improve, the student should focus on using more precise academic collocations and proofreading for spelling accuracy.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede readability, such as 'Not only local population contributes for rising number of locality' and 'High rise apartment can build in small are'. Subject-verb agreement and preposition usage are inconsistent. While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of errors in basic sentence construction prevents a higher score. The student needs to focus on sentence structure, specifically ensuring that subjects and verbs agree and that prepositions are used correctly.
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