Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-13
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
AS a population continously grow providing hoses in large cities is a major problem. I completely agree with the given statement.
Nowdays, population grow continously housing is the main problem in big cities. To takle this problem build tall apartments is the best way.
At first, tall apartments accommodate more people, so hundred of people live in less space which prevent farmland.They can use the fewer space in better way. Construct tall buildings helps to solve house shortage problem. The cities that are densely populated build a tall apartment there is specially is a best way. Vertical buildings use less space to its better to extend city in horizontally. Cities like Hong Kong where population is growing repadly they build high rise apartments because limited space.
Another major advantage of build tall apartments is more land is preserved for parks and Forrest. Rural area are preserved from urban expansion.
Furthermore, people can live close to their workplace like schools,offices and close to public transport. It's easy for people to travel less for work.
Moreover, its heels to reduce traffic
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you clearly state your position in the introduction, the arguments provided are underdeveloped and lack sufficient supporting evidence or examples. The points regarding land preservation and proximity to workplaces are relevant but are presented in a fragmented manner. To improve, you must expand on your arguments by providing detailed explanations and concrete examples, ensuring that you meet the length requirement to allow for a full exploration of the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay shows some attempt at logical organization, with an introduction and body paragraphs. However, the progression of ideas is often disjointed due to the brevity of the response. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'At first', 'Another major advantage', and 'Furthermore', but they are sometimes used mechanically or incorrectly. Paragraphing is present, but the paragraphs are very short and lack internal cohesion. To improve, focus on using a wider range of linking words to connect sentences and ideas more fluidly, and ensure each paragraph develops a single, clear main idea.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, which restricts your ability to express complex ideas. There are several spelling errors, such as 'continously' instead of 'continuously', 'hoses' instead of 'houses', 'takle' instead of 'tackle', 'repadly' instead of 'rapidly', and 'heels' instead of 'helps'. These errors, combined with a lack of variety in word choice, make the writing feel basic. To improve, focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to urban planning and housing, and proofread your work carefully to correct common spelling mistakes.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'population grow' instead of 'population grows', and incorrect sentence structures, such as 'Construct tall buildings helps to solve'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and periods. The range of grammatical structures is limited, relying mostly on simple sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, including correct verb forms and subject-verb agreement, and practice using more complex structures like relative clauses or conditional sentences.
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