Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-15

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Many of people suffering from poverty they are not capable to own their house and they are depend on government of big companies. Many individuals argue that providing a home in tall building apartment in large cities is good enough. I believe that it is best way to provide enough residence in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

By providing homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks it has numerous of advantages. If government provides this homes they will be more affordable. More people will can afford it and can spend their life in a better way. It will represents a infrastructure of country . It will assist in economy of one country. In large cities there are many opportunity for youngsters as well as elder people. From providing homes in a tall build apartment it help to manage people in one place. The people can learn how to adjust with other. It can lead the great bond and relationship with others.

In contrast, it can make a city more crowded and more polluted. If they all live in large city they can forget their roots, they can be selfish and rude with other. If all will live in big cities the countryside area will extinct and the country will full of pollution and which can cause many heath issues like asthma, cancer deafness and many more.

To conclude, after arguing on both perspective of context, the government will provide residence to people will be more beneficial in many ways like these homes are less expensive and can teach individuals how to mange with other. On other side, it can make a city more crowded and polluted. I firmly agree with this context that providing a homes in large cities to build tall apartment blocks it a better way of residence.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position in favor of tall apartment blocks. However, the development of ideas is limited. While you mention affordability and infrastructure, these points are not fully extended with specific examples or logical depth. The arguments regarding social interaction and the negative impacts (pollution, health) are somewhat repetitive and lack nuance. To improve, you should focus on providing concrete examples—such as mentioning a specific city or a real-world urban planning concept—to support your claims. The position is consistent, but the overall depth of the argument remains at a basic level.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or repetitive (e.g., 'In contrast', 'To conclude'). There are instances where the logical flow between sentences is disjointed, such as the transition between the benefits of tall buildings and the mention of 'youngsters as well as elder people'. Referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly in the second paragraph where 'it' is used repeatedly without a clear antecedent. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each sentence logically follows the previous one would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and range required for a higher band. You rely on basic terms like 'good enough', 'better way', and 'many more'. There are also some awkward collocations and word choices, such as 'extinct' when referring to countryside areas and 'manage with other' instead of 'socialize' or 'interact'. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of sophisticated or topic-specific vocabulary (e.g., 'urban density', 'sustainable development', 'high-rise housing') limits the score. Expanding your range of academic vocabulary will help you express your ideas more effectively.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow of reading. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('Many of people... they are', 'it help to manage'), article usage ('the infrastructure of country'), and sentence structure ('Many of people suffering from poverty they are not capable to own their house'). While you attempt some complex structures, they are often inaccurate, such as 'If all will live in big cities the countryside area will extinct'. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles before attempting more complex grammatical forms.

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