Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-15

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The beneficial way to provide enough accomodations in biggest urban area to have been built tallest apartment Rooms . I largely agree with this statement as there are multifarious factors which would be looked at and critically evaluated before any final conclusion can be drawn.

To commence with, apartment is beneficial for businessmen or middle class individual it has been built up in urban area. for example, Chandigarh, delhi, ludhiana, Mohali so on there are individual working in this cities so some individuals are suffer with up and down our city to another city. So it is assist to them. Thus, in appartments all things are available.

Furthermore, It is good oppurtunty for that individuals they do work in another city without own family. It cover long distance. for instance,

A ~~man~~ is do work in ~~city~~ it appartment

it apartment is assit to ~~live~~ with family because it appartment is largest there are all fecilities available like as garden for yoga ~~morning walk~~, play grownd for children, and swimming pool for ~~children~~ children or youngsters and all. Hence, it makes joyful life with family or any single individul.

On the other hand, apartment is to much expensive rather than a house. A house is afordable for all individuals. Even so apartment is only for richest individuals. They earn much money by our business. ~~a~~ apartment have a only single design ~~in a full apartment~~ But ~~we~~ ~~construct~~ house with own ~~taste~~ taste according.

To conclude, ~~Although~~ both are okay it is depends on ~~the~~ individuals choice.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by expressing a position, but the development of ideas is fragmented and lacks depth. While you mention benefits like convenience and facilities, the arguments are not clearly linked to the core issue of 'providing enough homes' in large cities. The explanation is often repetitive and lacks specific, well-developed examples. The conclusion is vague and does not effectively summarize the main points. To improve, you should focus on developing each paragraph with a clear topic sentence, supporting evidence, and a logical explanation of how that point relates to the prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow between and within them is weak. The use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as the repetitive use of 'for example' and 'furthermore' without clear transitions. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow your argument. For instance, the transition between the benefits of apartments and the counter-argument about cost is abrupt. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a singular, clear focus would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is limited and often imprecise, which hinders the clarity of your message. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'up and down our city' instead of 'commuting' and 'biggest urban area' instead of 'major cities'. You also struggle with basic terminology, using 'rooms' instead of 'units' or 'apartments'. To reach a higher band, you need to expand your range of vocabulary to include more academic and topic-specific terms and focus on using them in the correct context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'apartment is assist to them'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack proper punctuation, making them difficult to parse. While you attempt some complex structures, they are often faulty and contain errors that distort the intended meaning. Focusing on mastering basic sentence construction, verb tenses, and subject-verb agreement is essential before attempting more complex grammatical structures.

See this exact question answered at other band scores — the same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.